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Brave Hey! I've just wanted to write a notebook. I really don't know what I'm doing, but I know why. I wish you could tell me if I'm writing... Hmm, correctly is not what I mean. Maybe naturally? Now I think I'll write anything that dawns on my mind. There was a boy, he was kind of shy and because of that, he wanted to be like his cousin, who was much more prankish than him. Well, one day he picked up two knives in the kitchen and went out for an adventure. When he was turning the left corner of his block, he noticed 3 wolves eating leftovers spread through the street. Damn it! He needed to be brave. If he doesn't face the obstacle, what would be the purpose of his journey? Thank you.

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Brave

Hey! I've just wanted to write a notebook. I really don't know what I'm doing, but I know why.
I wish you could tell me if I'm writing... Hmm, correctly is not what I mean. Maybe naturally?
Now I think I'll write anything that dawns on my mind ( you can't say 'dawns on my mind', however, you can say 'dawns on me', or 'comes to my mind' otherwise a great use of idioms).

There was a boy, he was kind of shy and because of that, he wanted to be like his cousin, who was much more prankish than him. Well, one day he picked up two knives in the kitchen and went out for an adventure. When he was turning the left at the corner of his block, he noticed 3 wolves eating leftovers spread throughout the street. Damn it! He needed to be brave. If he doesn't face the obstacle, what would be the purpose of his journey?

Thank you.

Ha! That was great, and very few mistakes! Well done, Charlotte

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Brave

Hey! I've just wanted to write a notebook. I really don't know what I'm doing, but I know why.

I wish you could tell me if I'm writing... hmm, correctly is not what I mean. Maybe naturally?
Now I think I'll write anything that dawns on my mind.

There once was a boy. He was kind of shy, and because of that, he wanted to be like his cousin, who was much more prankish than him. Well, one day he picked up two knives in the kitchen and went out for an adventure. When he was turning the left at the corner of his block, he noticed three (<--Numbers under 100 should be written as words.) wolves eating leftovers spread throughout the street. Damn it! He needed to be brave. If he doesn't didn't face the obstacle, what would have been the purpose of his journey?

Thank you.

This may be a random story, but it works. Nicely done, Vitor! =)

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