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Please correct my sentences I wrote. This is the explanation of some mountain that I climbed. I want to post these sentences on my blog(*) with natural English. Please help me. *https://gogomountain.blogspot.jp/2016/11/nyoho.html ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I climbed Mt.Nyoho which is located in Nikkou of Tochigi prefecture. I was so excited when I walked on the snow! Finally winter's coming after the so long summer. I climbed this mountain to examine for next climbing in advance. I'm going to climb this mountain once again in next January with mountain climbing club's members. I'm playing a role of leader at that time so I need to find the places we set up a tent. Because it would be very difficult to climb for just one day when it is covered with lots of snow. Mt.Nyoho has completely turned yellow and red. On top of that, it already started to wear a winter clothes. Even though I couldn't enjoy the view on the top because of the bad weather, but I'm satisfied. I can't take all of them at once. Since the bad weather keeps the ices and snow from the sun, so I could enjoy it. I hope I can see the fabulous scenery on the next climbing of January.

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Please correct my sentences I wrote.

This is the explanation of some mountain that I climbed. I want to post these sentences on my blog(*) with natural English. Please help me.
*https://gogomountain.blogspot.jp/2016/11/nyoho.html

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I climbed Mt.Nyoho which is located near the city of Nikkou in the Tochigi prefecture of Japan. I was so excited when I walked on the snow! Finally, winter's coming after the so long summer.

I climbed this mountain to examine it in advance for the next climbing trip. (not sure what you are trying to say here. Does not make sense but I will guess). I'm going to climb this mountain once again in next January with members of the mountain climbing club's members.

I'm taking on playing the role of leader at that time so I need to find the places where we can set up a tent. Because it would be very difficult to climb for just one day when it is covered with lots of snow so we need to camp overnight.

Mt.Nyoho has completely turned yellow and red. On top of that, it already started to wear a winter clothes (does not make sense. Do you mean the leaves?). Even though I couldn't enjoy the view on the top because of the bad weather,  I was satisfied. I can't take all of them at once (does not make sense). Since the bad weather keeps the ices and snow from the sun, so I could enjoy it (does not make sense. I can't get what you are trying to say). I hope I can see the fabulous scenery on the next climbing trip in January.


You have a good start here but some sentences do not make sense.


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Please correct my sentences I wrote.

This is the explanation of some mountain that I climbed. I want to post these sentences on my blog(*) with natural English. Please help me.
*https://gogomountain.blogspot.jp/2016/11/nyoho.html

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I climbed Mt.Nyoho which is located in Nikkou of Tochigi prefecture. I was so excited when I walked on the snow! Finally winter's coming after the so long summer. such a long summer.

I climbed this mountain to examine it in advance for the next climbing  ascent .  I'm going to climb this mountain once again in next January with mountain climbing club's members. members of the mountain climbing club.

I'm playing a role of leader Next time I'll be the leader (maybe: guide)  so I need to find the places we to set up a tent,  because it would be very difficult to climb up for in  just one day when it is covered with in lots of (I suggest: "deep" snow.

Mt.Nyoho has completely turned yellow and red. On top of that, it already started to wear a winter clothes.(I assume you are talking about autumn colors??? Find another way to describe it, doesn't sound right,especially the "mountain wearing winter clothes" ) Even though I couldn't enjoy the view on the top because of the bad weather,I'm satisfied. I can't take all of them at once.(??? "You can't ask for everything" or something like that?) Since the bad weather keeps the ices and snow from the sun, so I could enjoy it.(again don't understand) I hope I can I'll be able to see the fabulous scenery again on the next climbing of(when climbing/ascending)  in January.

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