National Sibling Day! (Day 9 of my daily journal)

今天是National Sibling Day! 我写给我姐姐和给说：我爱你！

我姐姐是大学生。她现在在Reno上学。当我给她写信的时候，她在工作了。她回家后，她给说：我爱你！我想你！

我姐姐是好人/人很好，她 是真/很棒！我很爱她！她是我的好朋友，我很想她！

Today is National Sibling Day! I wrote to my sister and said, "I love you!"

My sister is a college student. She is studying in Reno. When I wrote to her, she was at work. When she returned home, she told me, "I love you! I miss you!"

My sister is a good person, she is awesome! I really love her. She is my great friend and I miss her a lot!

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Very lovely essay I have to say:)

here are my suggestions>...well, it's my habbit to give ppl correction explanation 

1. 我写给我姐姐和给说：我爱你！usually in english, verbs should be connected with conjunctions..right?..like here, I wrote her and said, but in Chinese, the word"and"[和] is not used very often,..hm, you better use sentence similar to english "I wrote her saying"> actually, you can also just get rid of "说" in this sentence

2. she studies in reno> she-她, is studying-正在学习, in/at-在, so the translation could be> 她正在雷诺（Reno）上学...as for chinese sentences formation, we usually put it this way> subject+(auxiliary)/preposition+place+main verb..which is a little different from that of english, bt you better get used to it since you are learning a different language:)...let's make a little example> 她在学校读书> she reads books at school> 她-she, 在-at, 学校-school, 读书>reads..see, place is put before main verbs

3...的时候>when...well, it is true that the relevant translation of when is ..的时候, however, we often use a verb ahead of the 的时候 phrase> 读书的时候> (transliteration) read when[when reading, but in Mandarin we say read when]; 玩游戏的时候> play games when(玩游戏=to play games)[when playing games]; 看(see)电影(a movie)的时候>see a movie when>when seeing a movie..so when you wanna make a mandarin sentence containing "的时候", a verb should put ahead of it

4.她回家后> ...sometimes an english word may indicate different mandarin meanings, like the word "when">When she returned home, she told me, it's okay to say 当她回家的时候, but it doesn't sound natural, in mandarin...I think in this context, "when" actually refers to"after returning home", because you have to return home then you will have chances to say something to someone> so here I used the "她回家后" for this translation.....之后=after

5.she is awesome, in mandarin we don't use "是(be)"very often..

National Sibling Day! (Day 9 of my daily journal)

今天是兄弟姐妹日National Sibling Day! 我写给我姐姐和给说：我爱你！

我姐姐是大学生。她现在里諾市Reno学讀書。當的时候我写给她的时候，她已經在工作了。當她回来的时候会家，她对我给说：我爱你！我想念你！

我姐姐是个好人，她 是真/棒/牛/ [slang.  厉害 would be more sedate]！我很爱她！她是我好好朋友，我也很想念她！

What a nice brother!

Today is National Sibling Day! I wrote to my sister and said, "I love you!"

My sister is a college student. She is studying in Reno. When I wrote to her, she was at work. When she returned home, she told me, "I love you! I miss you!"

My sister is a good person, she is awesome! I really love her. She is my great friend and I miss her a lot!

Today is National Sibling Day! I wrote to my sister and said, "I love you!" 

今天是National Sibling Day! 我写给我姐姐说：“我爱你！” 

My sister is a college student. She is studying in Reno. When I wrote to her, she was at work. When she returned home, she told me, "I love you! I miss you!"
我姐姐是大学生。她现在里诺市上学。当我写给她的时候，她在工作。回家以后她告诉我：“我爱你！我想你！”
My sister is a good person, she is awesome! I really love her. She is my great friend and I miss her a lot!

我姐姐是个好人，她棒极了。我真的很爱她，她是我重要的好友，我很想念她。

National Sibling Day! (Day 9 of my daily journal)

今天是National Sibling Day! 我写给我姐姐和给说：我爱你！

我姐姐是大学生。她现在Reno学上学。的时候我写她，她在工作了我写给她的时候，她在工作。的时候会家她回到家的时候，她给对我说：我爱你！我想你！

我姐姐好人，她 是真棒！我很爱她！她是我好好朋友，也我很想她！

Today is National Sibling Day! I wrote to my sister and said, "I love you!"

My sister is a college student. She is studying in Reno. When I wrote to her, she was at work. When she returned home, she told me, "I love you! I miss you!"

My sister is a good person, she is awesome! I really love her. She is my great friend and I miss her a lot!

National Sibling Day! (Day 9 of my daily journal)

今天是National Sibling Day! 我写给我姐姐和给说：我爱你！ （我写纸条给我姐姐并且说：我爱你！

我姐姐是大学生。她现在Reno学（她现在在Reno上学）。的时候我写她，她在工作了（我写纸条给她的时候她还在工作）。的时候会家，她给说：我爱你！我想你！ （当她回到家的时候，她对我说：我爱你！我想你！）

我姐姐好人（我姐姐是个好人），她 是真棒（她很棒）！我很爱她！她是我好好朋友，也很想她（她是我的好朋友，我好想她）！

Today is National Sibling Day! I wrote to my sister and said, "I love you!"

My sister is a college student. She is studying in Reno. When I wrote to her, she was at work. When she returned home, she told me, "I love you! I miss you!"

My sister is a good person, she is awesome! I really love her. She is my great friend and I miss her a lot!