The Tragedy of Family Planning Tragedies

This morning when as I was having breakfast in at a noodle house, I encountered met Uncle Wang who is the county , the director of the family planning bureau of my county who is living upstairs from me. He is my upstairs neighbour.  We discussed that when it would be the best time to readjust the China's one-child policy which having been carried out for of more than 30 years in China.

It was implemented in the late 1970s, in order to control the population, by the Chinese Government to control over population.decided to implement the Family Planning which was also known as "one-child policy ". 1

This draconian policy brought disasters to many Chinese countless families, including mine.  It was about two years after I was born, my mother in her seventh month of pregnancy was  became pregnant for more than seven months. As the one-child policy, she was forced to induced abortion abort her child by the local authority. authorities.

In another case, one of my childhood friends, a child of nine drank drunk pesticide to commit suicide for his name when he was only nine end his life.  In the eyes of the law, he was illegal. As his family had already had a son2, he was illegal. According to Chinese law, his parents was fined a huge sum of money. Huge fines were imposed on offending parents and because of this, his parents he was named him Dau Yun (倒运), which means meaning bad luck in Chinese 2 and they prefered his brother much than him. The parents favoured the older brother over him and one day, after his parents scolded him for trifles again, he felt very sad became depressed and comitted suicidedrunk pesticide. A little creature gone away.light was snuffed out.

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What you really need is to increase your vocabulary to express the ideas in your head into English.  One way is to "read" the dictionary but it is so boring.  So read more books and learn from others.

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You write well because you write of things you know and experienced.

1.  Redundant.  You have indicated this in the previous sentence.  So this makes your writing long winded.

2.  Redundant.  Can be inferred from context.  Does not considered long winded.  May insult the intelligence of your readers.

The Tragedy of Family Planning

This morning when I was having breakfast in a noodle house, I encountered Uncle Wang, the director of Family Planning Bureau of my county who is living upstairs from me. We discussed that when would be the best time to adjust the one-child policy, which having  [has] been carried out for more than 30 years in China.

In the late 1970s, in order to control the population, [The] Chinese government decided to implement the Family Planning , which was also known as [the] "one-child policy ".

This policy brought disaster to many Chinese families, including mine. About two years after I was born, my mother became pregnant [for more than seven months] Consider revising. As [Because of] the one-child policy, she was forced [into] induced abortion by the local authority.

Another case, one of my childhood friends drunk [drank] pesticide to commit suicide for his name when he was only nine. As his family had already had a son, he was illegal. According to Chinese law, his parents was [were] fined a huge sum of money. Because of this, his parents named him "倒运" which means bad luck in Chinese , and they prefered his brother much than him. One day, his parents scolded him for trifles again. He felt very sad and drunk [drank] pesticide.
[???A little creature gone away.???] <== consider revising, I do not understand this.

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The Tragedy of Family Planning

This morning whenwhile I was having breakfast in a noodle house, I encountered Uncle Wang, who is the director of my county's Family Planning Bureau of my county who is livingand lives upstairs from me. We discussed that when we thought would be the best time to adjust the One-Child Policy, which havinghas been carried outin effect for more than 30 years in China.

In the late 1970s, in order to control the population, the Chinese government decided to implement the Family Planning, which was also known as the "One-Child Policy," in efforts to control the country's  population.  This policy brought disaster to many Chinese families, including mine.  About two years after I was born, my mother became pregnant. for more than seven months. As Because of the One-Child Policy, she was forced to induced abortion by the local authoritylocal authorities forced her to induce an abortion after more than seven months of pregnancy.

In another case, one of my childhood friends drunk pesticide to committed suicide by drinking pesticide for his name when he was only nine.  As his family had already had a son when he was bor, he was illegal.  According to Chinese law, and his parents waswere fined a huge sum of money according to Chinese law.  Because of this, his parents named him "倒运," which means "bad luck" in Chinese, and they very much prefered his brother over him.  much than him.  One day, after his parents had scolded him for triflestrivial matters yet again, he felt very sadcould no longer bear the sadness and drunkdrank the deadly pesticide,. A little creature gone away. an innocent young life tragically wasted.