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again~~sentences making~~thanks for your revising!!!! At first, I planed to write essays since last week, however, I found that it is really hard to write, so I decided to finish my sentences making first and then begin to write essays:) Here it is my sentences below, please help me to revise them and make them more native and smoothly. Detail: 1, I need the detail of this traffic accident to develop my investigation. 2, Could you detail all your expenses on this form? Development: The government is trying their effort to promote the development of the city. Digestion: The disease of the stomach would damage the digestion. Direction: We need to find the direction firstly and then get out of the forest. Discovery: The explorers made a discovery of a new cave. Discussion: Students organized a discussion about the tuition fee. Disease: Mr. Johnson has got the heart disease for many years. Distance: There is long distance from our city Wuhan to the capital Beijing. Division: (here I need make sentences when the division means “separate”, how?) Doubt: There is no doubt that careless leads to accidents. Driving: (here I have to make sentences respectively in the condition of that “driving” used as noun and verb. ) Dust: 1, Lots of dust (n.) filled with this busy work site. 2, Get a cloth and dust (v.) off the dust on your desk. Here the “dust” used as a verb which means “swept”. Earth: There is only one earth in the solar system. Education: In China, the students under grade nine are obliged to finish the free education.

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again~~sentences making~~thanks for your revising!!!!

At first, I planed to write essays since last week, however, I found that it is really hard to write, so I decided to finish my sentences making first and then begin to write essays:) Here it is my sentences below, please help me to revise them and make them more native and smoothly.

Detail: 1, I need the details of this traffic accident to develop for my investigation.
2, Could you detail all your expenses on this form? (Could you please write down on this form all your expenses in detail?)
Development: The government is trying their effort to promote the development of the city.
Digestion: The This disease of the stomach disease can damage the digestive system would damage the digestion. (This disease can slow down/prevent digestion)
Direction: We need to find the which direction is north firstly and then get out of the forest.
Discovery: The explorers made a discovery discovered of  a new cave. (The explorers' discovery of a new cave system was a terrific find)
Discussion: Students organized a discussion about the tuition fee.
Disease: Mr. Johnson has got the had heart disease for many years.
Distance: The re is long distance from our city Wuhan to the capital Beijing is rather far.

Division: (here I need make sentences when the division means “separate”, how?) (In the U.S., there is supposed to be a division between church and state)
Doubt: There is no doubt that carelessness leads to accidents.
Driving: (here I have to make sentences respectively in the condition of that “driving” used as noun and verb. ) (V) I was driving to work yesterday when I hit a deer. (N) Driving has advantages and disadvantages: its fun to hit deer, but it also creates a lot of pollution.
Dust: 1, Lots of dust (n.) filled with this busy work site.
2, Get a cloth and dust (v.) off the dust on off your desk. Here the “dust” used as a verb which means “swept”.
Earth: There is only one earth in the solar system.
Education: In China, the students under are required to attend school up to grade nine ninth grade are obliged to finish the free education. (The Chinese education system requires students to attend school up to ninth grade.)
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Again~~sentence making~~thanks for your revising!!!!

At first, I planed to write essays since last week, however, I found that it is really hard to write one, so I decided to finish my sentence making first and then begin to write essays.  :) Here it is are my sentences below, please help me to revise them and make them more native and smoothly / clear. 

Detail: 1, I need the details of from this traffic accident to develop my investigation.
2, Could you detail all your expenses on this form?
Development: The government is trying their effort to promote the development of the city.
Digestion: The A disease of the stomach would damage the complicate digestion.
Direction: We need to find the directions firstly and then in order to get out of the forest.  
Discovery: The explorers made a discovery of a new cave.
Discussion: The students organized a discussion about the tuition fee.
Disease: Mr. Johnson has got the had / suffered from a heart disease for many years.
Distance: There is a long distance from between our city, Wuhan , to and the capital , Beijing.

Division: (here I need to make a sentence when the using "division", meaning “separate”.  How can I?)  
-The fence caused a division between my yard and the neighbor's yard.  ->  [simpler] The fence divided my yard from the neighbor's yard.  
Doubt: There is no doubt that carelessness can lead to an accident.
Driving: (here I have to make sentences respectively in the condition of that using “driving” used as a noun and  a verb.)
-(n.)  [I can't think of a sentence, sorry, haha.]
-(v.)  I was driving to work when my cellphone rang.
Dust: 1, A lot of dust (n.) filled / covered with this the busy work site.
2, Get a cloth and dust (v.) off the dust on your desk.  (Here the “dust” is used as a verb which means “sweep”.)
Earth:  There is only one Earth in the our solar system.
Education:  In China, the students under grade nine are obligated / required to finish the free education grade nine in school.  
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Hi Erin, I would encourage you to stick with essays, although writing short paragraphs is probably just as useful. Writing full paragraphs instead of sentences allows you to get used to all the joins between ideas and how they are expressed. English is full of context dependent relationship words that join two or more ideas in a sentence. Writing single short sentences cannot fully develop expression, the way that a paragraph will. Andrew.

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