Let's talk about science

Every day new evidences that supports the Theory of Evolution appears, and it is stronger than ever.  But at the same time, albeit paradoxically, the uninformed opposition has become stronger than I can remember.

'the Theory of Evolution' O 'evolution' sin mayuscula y sin artículo.

Pero en general, esto es MUY bien gramáticamente.  El error lo más grave es el orden de sujeto y el verbio.  'New evidence appears' – la cosa que hace el verbo antecede <em>siempre</em> el verbo.

Y perdóname, Uncle Bob, pero tu corrección es de hecho mucho peor que el original...

"I will believe in Evolution when a monkey gives birth to a human baby"

I will say it once more, the humans didn't descended from monkeys, we just share a common ancestor with them. It turns that the common ancestor was/looked a lot more like a monkey than a man, and we would have probably called it a "monkey" if we had found it twenty-five million years ago. But even though the humans had evolved from an ancestor that we would call sensibly "monkey", no animal gives birth instantly to a new or different species, or at least a none so different from itself as a man is from a monkey, or even from a Chimpanzeee. It is not of what evolution is. In fact, evolution is not only a gradual process, it < has > to be gradual if it wants to do a exploration work. The huge jumps in one generation-, as would be considered that of a monkey giving birth a man, are almost as far-fetched as the divine creation, and are discarded by the same reason: too unlikely from a statistical viewpoint. It would be nice if all those opposed to evolution are bothered to learn a little of the basic rudiments of what they oppose.

Otra vez, los errores en negrita son los más graves gramáticamente en los otros son estilísticos o no son tan graves.  En general, esto es mucho mejor que tu primera nota, aunque haya bastantes errores — las estructuras son más complicadas.  No sé que quieres decir cuando dices 'exploration work'.

Myself About me

My name is Juan, I'm a Biology student of Biology, and I'm learning English and I'm vegetarian. I would like to visit England one day; I love the English music. I think that I'm good speaking but when it comes to writing I'm not so good I guess, and also my pronunciation is full of mistakes. I've been learning English with a great friend from the UK, and it's a huge help, but I suppose (imagine?) that I need more. I really enjoy learning English, and teaching Spanish to others, so if I've made any mistakes, please correct them, and I wish you success with your learning :D Thanks

Las correcciones en negrita son los más importantes.  Los otros son más o menos errores estilísticos, pero mis sugerencias lo hacen parecer como si hubiera escrito por un Inglés :)

Unos tres más cosas...

If I'm mistake – Si me equivoco (de un hecho...) (pero es gramáticamente correcto :) )

to make mistakes – cometer un error (gramático, moral etc.)

Despues de "I believe", "I think", "I suppose" etc., evita 'that'.  No es incorrecto pero no parece muy inglés.

"I'm a vegetarian" y "I'm vegetarian" son correctos ambas :) se puede ser un adjectivo o un sustantivo.