Day trip

I took a day trip by train with my friend.
In there, we ate sweetfish. They were delicious.
But there are not any place of interest. So we backed few time from there. ??

I am not sure what you mean here, it is very hard to understand? but everything else is good, you should make your sentences more longer, as they are quite short!
And then, we went to IZAKAYA:)
I had a good day!

One of my hobby hobbies is watching movies .

I rent rented two DVDs last week which were 'TOY STORY 3' and 'Tangled`.
TOY STORY series are very interesting!
Third is usually a trashy.
But TOY STORY 3 is great by the end!!

And Tandled of heroine is the most cute in Desney moveis.!!!

I find the Toy Story Trilogy very interesting!, but the third movie is not as good as the first two untill towards the end of the movie where it is great! and Heroine from Tangled is the most cutest character in Disney movies!!

**Good work overall, practice some more and you will improve your english and remember (and) does not start a sentence and is never written in with a capital letter like this (And)

氷コーヒー Frozen Coffee

August has almost come to an end but it's still so hot everyday. So it's been enjoyable to drink something cold for a while.
氷コーヒー(こおりこーひー, frozen coffee) is one of my favourite drinks. It is milk with added coffee ice cubes to it. The way of making coffee ice cubes is to pour rather strong coffee into an ice cube tray and freeze it. To make coffee ice cubes poor strong coffee into an ice cube tray and freeze it. That's all! It's nice to add some sugar into the coffee as well.

Please point out any errors in my pronunciation as well.

8月ももう終わりますが、ものすごく暑い日々が続いています。そのため、しばらくは冷たい飲み物が楽しめそうです。
氷コーヒーは、わたしのもっとも好きな飲み物の一つです。これは、凍らせたコーヒーに牛乳を注いだものです。凍らせたコーヒーの作り方は、かなり濃く淹れたコーヒーを製氷皿に注ぎ、冷凍します。それで終わりです。コーヒーに砂糖を入れても、おいしいです。