First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My ambition is to be a good speaker of English. I would like learn it so i can get other friends from all over the world.

 

Good job. I can easily understand you. : ) 

Next time, please write in the notebook section because it is easier to correct. Can you correct me? Mark is 18 years old and his hair is short and black. He is not tall and is not in Venezuela, but is living in Colombia. He goes to the same school as me. we are in the same course and are best friends. He likes to shop when we are in the store. He buys a lot of shirts and pants, as well as a pair of shoes. He goes to the store every month when his parents give him money for clothing. He also has a part time job. He would like to go on a trip to Japan, but can't stay there for long. He would like to stay in a single room with a shower. He likes to eat an arepa with egg for breakfast with strawberries and juice in a cafe near the college. He does not like missing school or leaving early. He likes to eat something after leaving school, and likes to watch movies and animes. On Saturdays, he plays soccer with his friends, and on Sundays, he is with his family. he does not have a vehicle, so every day he takes the bus. He has a notebook which he carries almost every day to do work in.

I will give you two poems: Landscape With The Fall of Icarus by William Carlos Williams According to Brueghel when Icarus fell it was spring a farmer was ploughing his field the whole pageantry of the year was awake tingling near the edge of the sea concerned with itself sweating in the sun that melted the wings' wax unsignificantly off the coast there was a splash quite unnoticed this was Icarus drowning The Moon is distant from the Sea BY EMILY DICKINSON The Moon is distant from the Sea – And yet, with Amber Hands – She leads Him – docile as a Boy – Along appointed Sands – He never misses a Degree – Obedient to Her eye – He comes just so far – toward the Town – Just so far – goes away – Oh, Signor, Thine, the Amber Hand – And mine – the distant Sea – Obedient to the least command Thine eye impose on me – Ahhh! It just occurred to me that you asked for an English poet. Do you mean English, like from England? Or, do you mean English, like it is written in the English language? If you mean English like from England here is an excerpt from the poem Gunga Din by Rudyard Kipling: E carried me away To where a dooli lay, An' a bullet come an' drilled the beggar clean. 70 'E put me safe inside, An' just before 'e died: "I 'ope you liked your drink," sez Gunga Din. So I'll meet 'im later on In the place where 'e is gone— 75 Where it's always double drill and no canteen; 'E'll be squattin' on the coals Givin' drink to pore damned souls, An' I'll get a swig in Hell from Gunga Din! Din! Din! Din! 80 You Lazarushian-leather Gunga Din! Tho' I've belted you an' flayed you, By the livin' Gawd that made you, You're a better man than I am, Gunga Din!

About school bus safety

Recently, there have been some reports on deadly school bus accidents which have caused many innocent little lives to be ruined. This shows the seriousness of the school bus accidents and we must profoundly reflect on it.

What causes these accidents? The first and most important reason is serious overloading on school buses. And another factor that we must consider, is that our country has no perfect school bus standard. Also, school bus drivers' no safety consciousness should also not be overlooked.

Now on this question, the majority of experts suggest that departments concerned must establish safety regulations for school buses and the drivers must observe safety regulations. Additionally, constructing and refining mandatory technical standards for the quality of school busses used as transportation is the most powerful and important measure.

 

Awesome job! This is a tough subject to discuss in a language you are learing. I can clearly understand what you are trying to express. Keep up the good work! :)

Busy life, Better life

This busy week has not ended yet. We are ordered to get up at 6 a.m. to do morning exercises——Taiji(太极) every day，which almost kills me. At the same time, there are three nights a week (6 hours) in which I tutor a grade-5 boy to earn my weekly living. Then there are tons of things waiting for me to finish. I have 9 book reports unfinished. I borrowed 5 or 6 books from the library, but they have been buried in my book shelves for 2 months.

The (or A) busy life makes a better life.

When I was busy, I would not feel alone. This is because I had no time to think of it. I used to be buried in sadness in this city which is far away from my hometown. As I gave up my private emotions every time while focusing on my work or study, it made me confident for my future, which also helped me to get rid of negative moods. [Giving up my private emotions every time while focusing on my work or study (this part is present tense while the rest of the sentence is past tense. That's why I changed it), it made me confident for my future, which also, helped me to get rid of negative moods.]  

When I was busy, I became energetic. I was always encouraged by every little progress, as I saw the lights of hope. The most fun thing in life was to challenge what I never did. Changing gave me a stronger and more experienced mind. Even when I failed, I forced myself to face and accept it.

When I was busy, I did concentrate more on improving my efficiency of work or study. College life is the advantageous condition to can make people lazy, degenerate, and unambitious (I wouldn't consider becoming lazy, degenerate, or unambitious an advantageous thing. To say "something is to my advantage" is a positive statement.). A busy life keeps my mind clear. Then I learn to save my time, do my work, or study better.

When I was busy, there were also unsatisying things that happened. With limited time, I was not able to achieve everything perfectly. Everyday I only slept for 6 hours or less. Even so, I was often sleepless at night. I had many books unread, many essays unwritten, and tons of knowledge unlearned. God, how I wish I could have 48 hours every day!

The (or A busy life...) busy life also makes me tired. I have missed the morning exercise twice.

However, I still enjoy my busy life. On the way to the student housing (Do you mean student housing or student dorms?), there is a stream running alongside the road. It's been a long time since i've written a poem, which I used to do as a game with my best friend when we were in high school.

The following is my poem. If you have any advice on my poem, feel free to discuss it with me.

石家庄初春杂感

北国风狂雪纷纷，
溪畔新柳早开颜。
南行回校步漫漫，
恍然福地现眼前。

 

I can't read your poem. Sorry! You write very well and I can easily understand you. Good job! One reacurring mistake which I did notice, is that you tend to jump between present and past tense. That is where a lot of my corrections came from. Thanks and keep up the good work! :)

This answer is to add to what Jesse and Gena said, which are also correct. The phrase "Like a bull in a china shop" is an idiomatic expression. It can also be used to describe nonphysical destruction. For instance, if I said "He is like a bull in a china shop and he breaks me into pieces." I am expressing that he clumsily hurts me, probably without meaning to. An animal that is let loose in a shop with fragile goods, doesn't destroy things on purpose; it doesn't know any better. I am also expressing that I am fragile like china (fragile, delicate, beautiful dishes), and easily broken by him. Hope this helps and it was a good question!

O.K., to be honest, I'm not %100 sure what you are asking. Are you asking whether the words "pressure" and "stress" have similar meanings? Are you wanting to know whether the word pressure can be used in examples 1 and 2? If so, here is my answer. In my opinion, pressure can be used in those sentences. When one thinks of pressure, one thinks of a feeling of stress. I would say the building pressures of work can cause a person to feel stressed, therefore I might say I take yoga to relieve those pressures and become less stressed. Here is a correction of your sentences: 1.relieve the pressure: He insists that on occasion, people do yoga and like activities that relieve the pressure of their work. 2.release the working pressure (The opening of this sentence is a fragment, so I will add a few words.) It will increase the salary and welfare for outsourcing employees and help to increase their business abilities, thereby releasing their working pressure.