Busy life, Better life

This busy week has not ended yet. We are ordered to get up at 6 a.m. to do morning exercises——Taiji(太极) every day，which almost kills me. At the same time, there are three nights a week (6 hours) in which I tutor a grade-5 boy to earn my weekly living. Then there are tons of things waiting for me to finish. I have 9 book reports unfinished. I borrowed 5 or 6 books from the library, but they have been buried in my book shelves for 2 months.

The (or A) busy life makes a better life.

When I was busy, I would not feel alone. This is because I had no time to think of it. I used to be buried in sadness in this city which is far away from my hometown. As I gave up my private emotions every time while focusing on my work or study, it made me confident for my future, which also helped me to get rid of negative moods. [Giving up my private emotions every time while focusing on my work or study (this part is present tense while the rest of the sentence is past tense. That's why I changed it), it made me confident for my future, which also, helped me to get rid of negative moods.]  

When I was busy, I became energetic. I was always encouraged by every little progress, as I saw the lights of hope. The most fun thing in life was to challenge what I never did. Changing gave me a stronger and more experienced mind. Even when I failed, I forced myself to face and accept it.

When I was busy, I did concentrate more on improving my efficiency of work or study. College life is the advantageous condition to can make people lazy, degenerate, and unambitious (I wouldn't consider becoming lazy, degenerate, or unambitious an advantageous thing. To say "something is to my advantage" is a positive statement.). A busy life keeps my mind clear. Then I learn to save my time, do my work, or study better.

When I was busy, there were also unsatisying things that happened. With limited time, I was not able to achieve everything perfectly. Everyday I only slept for 6 hours or less. Even so, I was often sleepless at night. I had many books unread, many essays unwritten, and tons of knowledge unlearned. God, how I wish I could have 48 hours every day!

The (or A busy life...) busy life also makes me tired. I have missed the morning exercise twice.

However, I still enjoy my busy life. On the way to the student housing (Do you mean student housing or student dorms?), there is a stream running alongside the road. It's been a long time since i've written a poem, which I used to do as a game with my best friend when we were in high school.

The following is my poem. If you have any advice on my poem, feel free to discuss it with me.

石家庄初春杂感

北国风狂雪纷纷，
溪畔新柳早开颜。
南行回校步漫漫，
恍然福地现眼前。

I can't read your poem. Sorry! You write very well and I can easily understand you. Good job! One reacurring mistake which I did notice, is that you tend to jump between present and past tense. That is where a lot of my corrections came from. Thanks and keep up the good work! :)

A Busy Life For A Better Life

This is quite a busy week that has not quite 1 ended yet. We are commanded required to get up at 6 a.m. everyday to do our morning exercises——Taiji Tai Chi 2 (太极) every day， which almost kills This is killing me! At the same time, there are for three nights (6 hours) a week, I have to tutor a grade-5 boy for two hours each time to earning my living every week. Then there are tons of things work waiting for me to finish. I have 9 nine unfinished book reports... unfinished. I borrowed 5 or 6 For two months already, the five or six borrowed library books from the library but they have been are still buried in my book shelves booksheves for 2 months .

A busy life makes a better life!

When I was am busy, I would do not feel lonely alone. This is because I had no time to Too busy to think of it. Iused to bury in sadness in this far away city which is far away from my hometown. Giving up the private emotions every time By focusing on my work or and study, it made me I became confident for of my future and at the same time chasing my blues away. , which also, helped me to get rid of negative moods.

When I am  was busy, I became I am energetic. I was am always encouraged by every little bit of progress.  Progress are , seeing the lights of hope. The most greatest fun of in my life is to challenginge what things I have never done beforedid. Changing gave Changes make me stronger and my mind will become more experienced minds. Even in failure failed, I am forced myself to face and accept the facts it.

When I was am busy, I did concentrate more on improving my efficiency of in work or and study. The laissez faire college life is the advantageous condition tends to make minds dull and unproductive. people lazy, degenerate, unambitious. A busy life keeps my minds clear and sharp. Being busy makes me manage my time well so that my work and study will not suffer. Then I learn to save my time, do my work or study better.

When I was am busy, there were are also things left untouched.  unsatisfied stuffs to happen. Time limiting, There are only 24 hours in the day and not a second more.  I was not able to cannot achieve perfection in things that need to be done. everything perfectly. Everyday I just can only sleep for 6 six hours or less. Even so, I was am often sleepless at night. I have So many books unread, so many essays unwritten, tons of knowledge unlearn and so much to learn! God, How I wish I long to have 48 forty eight hours every each day!

A busy life also makes me tired - so very tired. I have had missed the morning exercises twice already.

However No matter what, I still enjoy my busy life. On the way to my student’s home, there is a nearby stream along it. I would take this opportunity to write poems as I walk past the stream.  3 It has been a very long time ago since I had written one. no writing poems, which I composed played it as a game them as a game with my best friend when we were in high school.

The following is my poem. If you have any advice on my poem, feel free to discuss it with me.  This is my poem which I had written. Please feel to comment on it.  All advice are welcome and it will be great to have a discussion on it.

石家庄初春杂感   Random Thoughts of Early Spring At the House of Stone.

北国风狂雪纷纷，Fury is the northern Chinese wind, scattering snow a wild.
溪畔新柳早开颜。Gentle is the sprouting of willows by the stream.

南行回校步漫漫，Slowly, I walked the southern route to my school,
恍然福地现眼前。Suddenly the blessed earth appeared before my very eyes.

I gather the blessed earth represents your school grounds.

As for your tenses...  Most of it should be in the present tense.  Two reasons for it.  You are describing your current state.  There are somethings that will never change.  This includes facts, truths etc.  So it must be in present tense.  Others such as "When I am busy...", this means that you are still experiencing it. So if you use past tense, then it means that when you are busy now, those thing you mentioned in your essay no longer holds.  "When I was busy, I don't feel lonely."  This means that when you are busy now, you DON'T feel lonely.

I have added words here and there to decorate your essay and makes it more interesting and with more feeling. 

1.  I am playing with the word "quite".  As Lauren had corrected, her version is the simplest and most direct.  However the tone of essays is usually set by the tone of the first sentence.

2.  Tai Chi is now an accepted word in the English language.  "Taiji", however is not!  This is squatter's rights.  Cantonese came first and established its roots earlier than Mandarin.  Everyone knows what Kungfu is but not Gungfu.  However, some Mandarin words such as Gungho came first.

3.  You need something like this because there is no connection with the stream and what your were doing in the past.  Either this or completely remove all reference of the stream.  This will puzzle your readers to no end.