TO BE OR NOT TO BE

My name is Mona, I'm 34 years old, and I have 2 children, Fesal and Noor. I love the English language and i want to excel in it because it's a world language.

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

It is quite common these days for young people in some countries to take a break after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students who can spend money on travel; poorer students can also choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.

The reason for this trend may relate to the recognition that young people who pass directly from school to university are rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and social experience. So, those who spend time or money on earning a living or travelling to other places have a broader horizon in their life, and precious personal resources. They tend to more independent, which is an important factor in academic study. At the same time, it seems that they are more experienced to solve the problems in personal relationships.

However, there are certainly dangers in doing these things at that important age. First, the young adults lack the awareness needed to protect themselves. Second, if they lose themselves in travelling or playing, it is difficult to return to their studies, or hard to adapt again to the academic environment. Sometimes, students may think getting the social experience is more useful than the academic qualification.

In my opinion, young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizon and views. Students can get a clearer perspective of what they are hoping to do in the future. Those who have such a perspective can choose the right major when they enter university.

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(I accidentally added this as a comment, sorry!) Extending something in this case means that it's growing taller or longer. It's about height. Extending means that it's getting bigger in one direction. Expanding means that it's getting bigger in several directions, even every direction, like a blob or a balloon. It's about the overall size of an object, not just its height. Sentence 1: "The pole extended out of the ground." This works because a pole is long and thin, and it's moving in one direction. Sentence 2: "The balloon expanded as she blew into it." This works because a balloon is growing in every direction. A pole can't expand, because it can't get wider. A balloon usually doesn't extend, because it spreads in many directions, not just one. :)

Extending something in this case means that it's growing taller or longer. It's about height. Extending means that it's getting bigger in one direction. Expanding means that it's getting bigger in several directions, even every direction, like a blob or a balloon. It's about the overall size of an object, not just its height. Sentence 1: "The pole extended out of the ground." This works because a pole is long and thin, and it's moving in one direction. Sentence 2: "The balloon expanded as she blew into it." This works because a balloon is growing in every direction. A pole can't expand, because it can't get wider. A balloon usually doesn't extend, because it spreads in many directions, not just one. :)