12／29 今天的日记

我的公司是新兴企业（not wrong, but a little bit weird, recommand "我的公司正处于起步阶段"），所以我对什么成功的因素（能够使一个刚起步的公司走向成功）感兴趣。
我看有关这的评论了。 我曾读过一篇关于这方面问题的文章。[Article=文章、论文、著作(normally this word regards as BOOK), comment = 评论、注释］

这个评论说成功的因素是做新选择，在多人信不在选择。

该文章认为一个初成立的公司必须能够在他人看似没有选择的余地时，做出自己的选择。

(this sentence is translated according to your English essay, but I'm wondering if you read this article in English. I guess maybe the article is written in Japanese, and you want to say " a startup company has to break through the coming challenges by finding a point where people usually cannot see)

看后，我感动了。我被这文章震撼到了。

(you're not emotionally touched by the article because it's an article taking about love, feeling, tragedy, etc. so it's not appropriate by using "感动".)

Sorry for my harsh comments, please don not feel frustrated. you're doing well! がんばって！