16) Keep a diary (Friday, June 12, 2020.)

Friday, June 12, 2020.

Recently, I have been obsessed with cheesecake. <s>It came to mind </s>I realized that I could it make myself. I could customize recipes for cheesecake, like the sugar level, ingredients, cream cheeses, butter, and so on...It also costs <s>also</s> less than buying it outside. I remember<s>ed</s> that I searched a lot<s>s</s> <s>of </s>about how to make cheesecake before I made it. I <s>felt </s>got a little headache after <s>during</s> searching because it was the first time that I tried to make a cheesecake and there are lots of ways to make it. It was confusing to look at so many things. <s>the eyes by looking at many things.</s> I remember<s>ed</s> the first time that I made it I cut five pieces of cream cheese and put them in the pan and heated it until they <s>gets</s> melted. And then I put 30g of sugar, 120g of cream cheeses, and 120g of table cream in the pan, then stirred it. This took about 10 to 15 minutes. Afterward, I added 7g of gelatine and stirred until <s>all stir </s>well combined. Then I put them in the container and refrigerated it for <s>fridged</s> 30 minutes to 1 hour. Finally, I could enjoy it. It was tasty <s>that I was</s> and unexpectedly delicious. It looks like I have a talent for this.

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Here is an explanation of some of my changes:

"It came to mine" isn't grammatically incorrect to say, but if you want to emphasize that you suddenly thought of something, "I realized" is better.

I edited this sentence: <It also costs <s>also</s> less than buying it outside.> When you compare two things, those things are normally the same type of word (For example, both nouns or both verbs). I changed "buy" to "buying" because "buying" is the noun form, and here you're comparing buying to "it." An example of comparing with two verbs would be "It is cheaper to make cheesecake than to buy it." That same thought written with nouns would be "Making cheesecake is cheaper than buying it."

I changed "remembered" to "remember." When you're telling a story, it's common to use present tense to describe the act of remembering something while you're telling the story. When you use the past tense, you're describing the act of remembering that happened in the past. For example, if I'm telling a story about going outside in the winter, I could say "I remember it was a cold a snowy night." This means that right now, while I'm telling the story, I am remembering how cold and snowy it was. But if I say "I was going to go outside without a hat, but then I remembered it was cold out," I'm describing how in the past I remembered something.

Finally, I changed the tense of sentences where you describe making cheesecake to past tense because you are describing something that you already did. This might be different than the tense you find in recipes. Recipes are written in the present tense because recipes are giving commands. For example, a recipe might say "stir until the cream cheese is melted." But when you describe what you did, you would say "I stirred the cream cheese until it was melted."

I hope this helps! (Now I kind of want to go eat some cheesecake....)

A bad day at the airport.

It all began the last Wednesday when I had to go to the airport to take a flight to Buenos Aires City, but there was a traffic accident. So, I arrived late and the boarding gate had already closed, and I missed the flight.

The next flight that <s>it </s>was good for me<s>, it </s>departured <s>in</s><s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);"> </s>six hours later. I had to wait the whole time. Of course I arrived late to the other city and I lost one day of <s>capacitation</s> training, but <s>for</s> luckily<s>,</s> I could take the other five <s>course</s> days of the course.

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Hi Adrian!

Explanations for a few of my changes:

--I changed <take the flight to Buenos Aires City> to <take a flight to Buenos Aires City>. In English, "the" is used to talk about a specific thing, and usually it's something that the person you are talking to already knows about. "A" is used to talk about a thing in general. So, if you were talking to someone and you and that person both understood "the flight to Buenos Aires City" to refer to a specific flight (for example, the flight that leaves every Friday at 5:00), then "the" would be correct. But if you didn't have this understanding, then "a flight" would be correct. For a different example, if my friend said she wanted to to to "a bar downtown," then she is saying that she wants to go to any bar downtown. If my friend said she wanted to go to "the bar downtown," then is is saying that she wants to go to a specific bar (this could be because there is only one bar downtown, or it could mean that my friend and I have an understanding as to which bar downtown is "the bar" that she's referring to). If there was more than one bar downtown and my friend said "the bar downtown" and I didn't know which specific bar she was talking about, I would likely ask her "which bar?"

--I changed <later> to <late> a few times. Later is used for a comparison. For example, you could write "I arrived later than I wanted to" or "my friend arrived later than me." But if you don't want to include a comparison, you could just say "I arrived later." When someone just says "I arrived later," it makes me ask, "later than what?" Sometimes the rest of the paragraph answers that question, so you don't have to write it out. For example, you wrote that the other plane "departed six hours later." From the rest of the paragraph, I knew that you plane departed six hours later than your original plane.

--I changed <I had to wait this time> to <I had to wait the whole time>. I'm assuming that you mean that you had to wait for the six hours. "I had to wait this time" is not a grammatically wrong thing to say, but here "this time" refers to that instance you were at the airport, instead of, for example, the time you were at the airport last year. "I had to wait the whole time" makes it clear that it was an amount of time that you had to wait.

Espera que este te ayude! Estoy estudiando espanol y idomas no siempre estan facil!

Hi Fernando,

I'm new here too. My native language is English and I'm learning Spanish. Message me if you want to try doing a language exchange!

Estoy nueva aqui tambien. Mi lengua materna es ingles y estoy estudiando espanol. Puedes enviarme un mensaje si quieres hablar en ingles y espanol!

Caitlin