The process matters, the result is optional
Do you feel that getting to the next level of proficiency when learning a language is an increasingly hard task? The more you learn the more questions you have and further perfecting\improvement requires the more time and effort the better you speak your target language.
It must be like this. I heard from someone that people professionally engaged in martial arts also come along slower and slower when they have really mastered their subject\discipline. Every new level sets new goals and to refine your skills on such a high level you have to become unprecedentedly flexible, patient and resourceful. Not everyone possesses these qualities.
However, the temptation to speak like a native is strong and we continue struggling for achieving such fluency. Frankly, I doubt that most of people are able to get to this level. I doubt that I'm gifted enough to succeed. Yet, my motto has always been "The process matters, the result is optional". It helps to overcome the moments of frustration.
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The process matters; the result is optional
Do you feel that getting to the next level of proficiency when learning a language is an increasingly hard task? The more you learn the more questions you have, and further perfecting\improvement requires the more time and effort the better you speak your target language.
It must be like this. I heard from someone that people professionally engaged in martial arts also come along progress slower and slower when they have really mastered their subject\discipline. Every new level sets new goals, and to refine your skills on such a high level, you have to become unprecedentedly flexible, patient and resourceful. Not everyone possesses these qualities.
However, the temptation desire to speak like a native is strong and we continue struggling to achieve such fluency. Frankly, I doubt that most of people are able to get to this level. I doubt that I'm gifted enough to succeed. Yet, my motto has always been "The process matters; the result is optional.". It helps to overcome the moments of frustration.
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A few comments on my corrections:
I deleted "the" before "more" in this passage: <further perfecting\improvement requires the more time and effort the better you speak your target language.> Using a definite article like "the" means you're referring to something specific. Here, there is just more time and effort that is required in general, so "the" is not appropriate. However, "the" would be appropriate here: "The more you learn, the more time and effort is required." Here, the type/amount of time and effort directly correlates with the type/amount of learning that you're doing, so you're referring to a specific amount of time and effort.
I changed "come along" to "progress." "Come along" isn't wrong, but I think "progress" fits better.
I changed "temptation" to "desire." A temptation is normally something that come from outside of yourself. For example: "I am tempted by chocolate cake." Temptation is often used with something that has negative undertones, but this doesn't always have to be the case. For example: "Even though I am on a diet, the temptation of chocolate cake is strong." A desire is something that comes from within. Here, it seems like your goal to achieve a very high level of English comes from within. In fact, I think you could summarize your essay through a sentence like this: "Even though the temptation to stop learning can be strong, my desire to speak like a native is stronger."
I added in some commas. One reason I did is because, in written English, when there are two independent clauses (an independent clause is something that could stand alone as its own sentence and has a subject and a predicate/verb) are joined by a conjunction (such as "and," "or," or "but"), the a comma separates the independent clauses. The commas I added based on this rule are in green. The other time I added a comma was because, in written English, when a prepositional phrase comes at the beginning of a sentence or independent clause, the propositional phrase is followed by a comma. The comma based on this rule is in red.
I separated your motto with a semicolon instead of a comma. In written English, when two independent clauses aren't joined by a conjunction, they are separated by a semicolon. An important rule for using semicolons is that the text on either side of the semicolon must be able to stand alone as its own sentence.
Finally, at the end of your essay, I moved the period outside of the quotation marks. This could be a rule that differs between written British and American English.
I hope this helps, and you did a great job! These are the kinds of corrections I would expect to make for fluent speakers, as well.
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