Could you please help me <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">to</s> check my essay?
As a colllege student, I am convinced that we youngsters should not only earn degrees, but also develop abilities in various aspects. Otherwise, when we hunt for jobs in the future, we might fall into an embarassing situation as depicted in the cartoon, if we meet ill-advised employers.
Obviously, <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">discriminations on low degree interviewers can be reflected from the employer’s opinion</s> an employer's opinion may show discrimination for some degrees. But I think that employers should bear in mind that a degree is not equal to ability. <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">Several typical examples : First</s>, There is no doubt that professional skills are <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">absolutely</s> [no need for this extra adverb. It becomes redundant since you've already used "no doubt" at the beginning of the sentence.] stepping stones which will enhance a worker's <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">working</s> [another redundant word] efficiency, ensure more fruitful results, and enable them to go further in workplace. <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">Second</s> Also, <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">teamwork</s> the spirit of teamwork lays a solid foundation for a successful career.
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Common/idiomatic expressions in English:
<ul><li>to earn a (college) degree</li><li>not only.... but also</li><li>to hunt for a job</li><li>stepping stones</li><li>enable (someone) to do (something)</li></ul>
[My personal note: I love your point about a (university) degree is not equal to ability! Well said, and a very important topic. Nice essay! You express yourself very well.]