Well, I basically rephased and polished your article. I assume it is an study proposal but not a report after your study in China. To write similar articles, do please focus on logic and write in a professional manor.
Welcome to China~~I strongly agree with you that the cooperation between Japan and China is crucial.
Please revise my report for syudting abroad Jan 23, 2011
Trough this studying abroad, My aim is to acquire important skills to be a global manager.
First, I would very much like to master English and Chinese for practical use based on the importance of linguistic skill in the global society. At the same time, I will try to train my communication, listening, and negotiation skills during my stay in China.
Secondly, I want to study the Chinese Economy and investigate Chinese marketing to consider the potential business cooperation between China and Japan, specifically the business environment of Shanghai and Hongkong, since China is generally becoming the most important market in the world now.
For Shanghai, <strike>To be concrete</strike>(please rephase this, it hardly makes sense), I am very willing to study at Fudan university to focus my investigation on Pudong industrial area in order to understand why It plays such an important role of the growth of Chinese economy. In addition, I will study the global influence brought by the 2009 International Exposition in Shanghai . I intend to discover the reason behind Shanghai's prosperity in sightseeing business in <font color="#000000">a management perspective</font>. Furthermore, I will try to analyze the effect of transit trade in Shanghai.
At Hongkong, I am planning to join the Chinese University of Hongkong to study the trend of <font color="#ff0000">developing </font>Japanese corporation in china, for example uniqlo. Based on the fact that Hongkong is the city which is one of the centers of trade and finance in the world, it would be very meaningful for I to study multilateral trade and global management there.
Finally, I will also try to study Chinese culture. It is a endeavor for me to live in a fresh environment with people owning different cultural background. I believe the exploration will allow me to acquire many abilities and experiences.
To sum up, the target of my study in China is to nourish myself by working hard with Comrades ( wow, it is a dangerous word. I suggest "potential partners") who will be a business leaders in the world. Through this study, I will try to initiate a business and make inroads into Chinese markets. I believe I will finally become one of successful business women who lead the world economy.
