miomio's notebook entry: Jan 25, 2011

hey ! My name is Mio.I'm from Guangzhou, China.I want to learn Janpanese.I can speak Chinese (both cantonese and mandarin), English and a little Japanese.So,yoroshiku ne!


はじめまして、よろしくミオちゃん：）

Please revise my report for syudting abroad Jan 23, 2011

Trough studying abroad I want to acquire many skills to become a global manager.
First, I want to master English and Chinese to use in practice because linguistics is an important skill in the global society.
Second,I want to study the Chinese Economy.China is the most important country in the world now, so I study Chinese Marketing and Asian Business.
To be more specific, I want to study at Fudan University in the Puton industry area. It leads Chinese growth,so I will go there and research the reason that. わかりません。。。？
I also want to study the influence that the international exposition in shang hai has around the world. Shang Hai is the city which is prospering in the sightseeing business, so I want to study it from the management perspective. Furthermore, I will analyze the effect of transit trade in shang hai.
In the Chinese University of hong kong , I want to study the trend of Japanese corporation in china, for example uniqlo .
I also study business cooperative relation between japan and china. Hong kong is world's center of trade and finance, so I want to study multilateral trade and global management.
In china , I  plan on studying the Chinese culture at the same time.
I want to gain many skills and experiences by exploring this land, with it's interesting culture, history and people.
I also want to acquire communication, listening, and negotiation skills. My goal is to cultivate my mind by working hard with Comrades who will become business leaders in the world. I will acquire Chinese business communication skills, allowing me to create business and make inroads into Chinese markets. In conclusion, I’m going to be an excellent business man who can set up business and lead the world economy when this program finishes.

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それはすばらし！ 

Be careful when using names of places. They must all start with capitals. 

"I want to cultivate my mind by working hard with Comrades who will be a business leader in the world." --> Do you want to say that the people you work with will help you become a business leader in the world? OR are you trying to say that you want to work with people who are going to become business leaders in the world? OR that you want to work with people who are business leaders in the world? 

幸運, がんばってくださいひろきくん！：）

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hey there,

I´m Fabian from Germany and I´m looking for a tandem partner who can improve my English while I improve his German.
Currently I make my a-level. After finishing school, I want to travel to Australia as a backbacker.
Some further improvement in my English would be helpful :).


After finishing school --> what kind of school? College, University, Business school, Medical school, High school, and so on. :) 

"I am looking for a pen pal who can help me further improve my English while I  also help them with their German."  --> An even nicer way of saying it :) 

Currently I make my a-level.  --> The structure of this sentence is "awkward", meaning it does not sound "correct" together. 
Are you trying to say that "I am currently at the " A " level" ? 


Good luck ! I hope I helped :)