First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am Adele. I like traveling and playing <strike>doing </strike>outside sports. I would like to meet you, my friend, wherever you may come from.

a happy spacejacky's notebook entry: Apr 10, 2011

These days, I eat dinner with my 3 roomates <strike>every</strike> all the time .We <strike>both</strike> all feel happy.
"Both" refers to only two people. Since you have four people, using "all" is more suitable.

There is someone who chooses to cook, but <strike>for me,</strike> I prefer to wash the dishes haha. We all have our work to do, and we take responsibility to do it well. By now, there are some classmates who come eat with us <strike>to take part in use</strike> for one meal or more. Every time I see the smiles on their faces, I feel <strike>honor to</strike> proud of our cook<strike>er</strike>..haha, I thank her for her good cooking.

At the same time, I know <strike>of living a life</strike> life isn't easy. <strike>isn't a easy thing for me.</strike> I'm thankful <strike>Thank </strike>for all the people who do their chores, <strike>homework </strike> <font class="Apple-style-span" color="#800080">i</font>ncluding (do you mean "especially" instead of "including"?) the cooks!! Best of luck to them...

Dream trip

I wish I <strike>would </strike>could travel to Easten Africa and South Africa.
<strike>
Because of</strike>  The famous novel, Out of Africa, (underline or italicize book titles) <strike>which </strike>was <strike>wrote</strike> written by Isak Dinesen, who shows us an incredibly exciting experience of living in Africa.
There are multiple ways to write this sentence. The above is just a suggestion.

Some of my relatives just returned from watching the World Cup in South Africa. They traveled to Easten Africa to see the wild animals on the way, and have shown their pictures to me. It seems amazing.

For me, the best time of year to visit would be July to September, because that is the season of the great migration of animals.
Remember to only capitalize proper nouns. 

I intend to take the Kenya Airways flight from Hong Kong to Nairobi. After I arrive <strike>was arriveling</strike>, I would like to rent a Jeep to visit Lake Nakurn National Park and Masai Mara National Game Reserve for about 6 days.

The seventh day I would fly to Cape Town, and then I would go to an ostrich <font class="Apple-style-span" color="#FF0000">f</font>arm.
You should maintain parallel structure in the sentence.
Unless the place is actually called "Ostrich Farm", it shouldn't be capitalized.
 
After that, I would catch the ferry to Seal Island to say hello to the seals and <font class="Apple-style-span" color="#FF0000">p</font>enguins.Of course, I must try <strike>have </strike><strike>the </strike>South African wine tasting and visit <strike>the </strike>Cape Point by tram. I would spend a day just <strike>stay </strike>at the beach <strike><font class="Apple-style-span" color="#0000FF">an</font><font class="Apple-style-span">d</font><font class="Apple-style-span"> </font></strike>bathing in the sunshine.

I hope my dream will come true!

I also got the information from the internet. I must be vaccinated against <strike>The </strike>yellow fever 3 weeks before I leave.

Good job, you seem to have a pretty good grasp of English. Keep it up!

Sarah's notebook entry: Apr 10, 2011

I have an important test in 21 days. hmmm...the test is on English, so I want to improve my English.
I hope I can pass the test.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

my favorite fruit :apple
my favorite sports:yoga, dancing
I like travelling. I have been to Shanghai,Huangshan Mountain,Hangzhou,Suzhou,Nanjing and so on.
The next place I want to go is Hong Kong.
I dream <strike>I can</strike> to travel around the world one day.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is Nathalie, I <strike>have</strike> am 17 years old, <strike>Im life</strike> I live in the Dominican Republic<strike>a</strike>, I'm a friendly person (I think), I love life and laughing... My favorite color is yellow.....

Try using fewer commas because your sentence is grammatically incorrect (run-on sentence).
Trata de usar menos comas porque su oración no es correcta gramaticalmente (texto corrido).

For example:
My name is Nathalie. I am 17 years old, and I live in the Dominican Republic. I'm a friendly person (I think), and I love life and laughing. My favorite color is yellow.

En realidad, estoy aprendiendo español! En inglés, en vez de "tengo 17 años", se dice "soy 17 años". 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, I'm Caroline. I'm studying English because it is a world language <strike> e </strike> and it is very important. I love English, haha. <strike>too</strike> I also wish to <strike>world travel </strike>travel the world.

world travel - noun
travel the world - verb

First notebook entry

Hello. I am learning the English language as a basic studying (do you mean "at a basic level"?). I also plan to continue my studies in another area. While I <strike>keep </strike>stay focused on this goal, (I added "this goal" for clarity) <strike>in this </strike>I hope to continue improving my English through communicating <strike>may improve it </strike>with native speakers by the internet or traveling.