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Dream trip I wish I would travel to Easten Africa and South Africa.Because of the famous novel Out of Africa which was wrote by Isak Dinesen,shows us an incredibly exciting experience of living in Africa. Some of my reletives just returned from watching the World Cup in South Africa,they traveled to Easten Africa to see the wild animals by the way, show their pictures to me,It seems amazing. For me, the best time of year would be July to September, beacuse that is the season of Great Migration Animals. I intend to take the Kenya Airways flight from Hong Kong to Nairobi.After I was arriveling ,I would like to rent a jeep to visit Lake Nakurn National Park and Masai Mara National Game Reserve for about 6 days. The seventh day I want fly to Cape Town ,then go to the Ostrich Farm.After that,I would catch the ferry to Seal Island to say hello to Seals and Penguins.Of course I must have the South Africa Wine tasting and visit the Cape Point by tram .I would spend a day just stay at the beach and bathing the sunshine. I hope my dream come true! I also get the information from the internet.I must be vaccinated against The Yellow Fever 3 weeke before I get off.

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Dream trip

I wish I would could travel to Easten Africa and South Africa.

Because of  The famous novel, Out of Africa, (underline or italicize book titles) which was wrote written by Isak Dinesen, who shows us an incredibly exciting experience of living in Africa.
There are multiple ways to write this sentence. The above is just a suggestion.

Some of my relatives just returned from watching the World Cup in South Africa. They traveled to Easten Africa to see the wild animals on the way, and have shown their pictures to me. It seems amazing.

For me, the best time of year to visit would be July to September, because that is the season of the great migration of animals.
Remember to only capitalize proper nouns. 

I intend to take the Kenya Airways flight from Hong Kong to Nairobi. After I arrive was arriveling, I would like to rent a Jeep to visit Lake Nakurn National Park and Masai Mara National Game Reserve for about 6 days.

The seventh day I would fly to Cape Town, and then I would go to an ostrich farm.
You should maintain parallel structure in the sentence.
Unless the place is actually called "Ostrich Farm", it shouldn't be capitalized.
 
After that, I would catch the ferry to Seal Island to say hello to the seals and penguins.Of course, I must try have the South African wine tasting and visit the Cape Point by tram. I would spend a day just stay at the beach and bathing in the sunshine.

I hope my dream will come true!

I also got the information from the internet. I must be vaccinated against The yellow fever 3 weeks before I leave.

Good job, you seem to have a pretty good grasp of English. Keep it up!

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