Thank you everyone who answered & contributed stories. This was a fun question and I really enjoyed the variety of stories that came back. - B

Mandy's notebook entry: Dec 21, 2010

Sounds like you're writing a company email, I hope I get a % of the sales. ;)

Very glad to receive your reply，thank you very much.
Thank you very much!  We are glad to have received your (email, question, inquiry).

our company’s main products are mouth-blown glass products such as handicraft bottles, glass teapots, glass cups and so on, you will see them on our website www.hiche-glass.com.
Our company's main products are mouth-blown glass products such as hand-crafted bottles, glass teapots, glass cups and more.  You can see them all our our website, www.hiche-glass.com.

We are a professional company with years of experience in exporting wine bottles and champagne bottles.
We are a professional company and have years of experience in exporting wine and champagne bottles.

We provide the absolutely faultless services to our clients.
We pride ourselves on giving absolutely faultless service to our clients.

If you have any requests,let’s keep in touch with each other.
Please do not hesitate to contact us if you have any questions or special requests.

I am very pleasure to help you.
It is our pleasure to help you.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello.sir/madam,
<em>This is pretty formal and not that common anymore.  On a casual website like this, you could say </em>
Hi everyone! 

First please allow me make a self-introdution.
First, please let me introduce myself.  
<em>First, please allow me a moment to make a self-introduction.</em>

My name is Crystal,coming from Guangzhou High School,Guangzhou,China.
My name is Crystal and I coming from Guangzhou High School in Guangzhou, China.

I'm honoured to have the chance to tell you something about me.

Well,when I was still in my childhood,I had a dream.
When I was I child, I had a dream.  <em>Or - I had a dream when I was a child. </em> 

I wanted to be a useful man,devoting myself to society majoring computer science.
I wanted to be a useful person, devoting myself to society and majoring in computer science.
<em>In this context, man would be read as</em> 男 <em>so use person instead</em>.

Dream in mind,I keep studying hard,and doing well in all subjects.
With this dream in mind, I keep studying hard and doing well in all subjects.

And as a result,three years ago,I got the permisson to Guangzhou High School,which is a key one in Guangzhou city.
Three years ago, as a result of my hard work, I was given permission to enter Guangzhou High School, which is one of the best schools in Guangzhou city.  <em>(Probably 'I was admitted to Guangzhou High School is more appropriate if there was an application process before enrolling in the program).</em>


With a high grade and good responsibility,I was made monitor of the class,as well as captain of the school dancing team
Since I was a responsible person and had high grades, I was made both monitor of the class and captain of the school dancing team.

Good work!

the pandas are send to Macao

The panda named"kai kai""xin xin"have been send to Macao on 18,December.
The pandas named "kai kai" and "xin xin" have been sent to Macao on December 18. 


Many people espected about "what's the new condition that they lived".
Many people had questions about what the new living conditions would be for the pandas.
-> difficult to write as-is with the quotation you have selected.


The keeper said:"the condition are all accroding to the nature modern design,there are3 playgrounds ,2 are indoor all the sunshine can through it derectly,and the other is outdoor.
The keeper said, "the conditions are all according to a natural, modern design.  There are 3 playgrounds.  2 of the them are indoors but the the sun can shine into them directly.  The third playground is outdoors.

In order to make the pandas live comfortable the air condition are fixed in the room.
To make the pandas life more comfortable. the air conditioning is fixed in the rooms.
(or air temperature)


In addition,many trees are planted to let the pandas play and rest.
In addition, many trees have been planted to let the pandas play and rest.

Every year at this time,the Macao street are full of christmas grandpa,but now are panda photos,all the citizens are looking forward to the panda's arrival,especially the children.
At this time ever year, the streets of Macao are normally full of pictures of Santa Claus.  However this year they are filled with panda photos.  All of the citizens are looking forward to the arrival of the pandas, especially the children.
(christmas grandpa is probably how the Chinese words translate but generally he is referred to as Santa Claus)

In my opition, I think "kaikai"and"xinxin"will be cared very well.
In my opinion, I think that "kaikai" and "xinxin" will be cared for very well.
(or will be (very) well cared for)

Writing Practice 4

I think you are writing a novel!

Here I am! The following passage is another writing practice that I've just done. Please help me correct it or improve it.  I'd love to correct my mistakes and learn more. I would be grateful if anyone would help me.

DIRECTIONS:
Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should
1.describe the drawing briefly
2.explain its intended meaning, and then
3. give your comments.

(Here comes my essay)
As we can see from the picture, there is a huge net which has connected everyone <strike>all over</strike> in the world.
-> idiomatic usage; everyone from all over the world or everyone in the world

No matter young and old, men and women, people from every corner of the world are keeping in touch with each other by clicking the mouse and pressing the keyboard.

With its convenience, the Internet is narrowing the distance among people in both space and time.
Might be more natural to put 'with its convenience' at the end of the sentence.
The Internet is narrowing the distance among people in both space and time with its convenience.

However the drawing also tells: those "walls" emerge unnoticed among people when they are enjoying surfing online.
However the drawing also shows that unnoticed "walls" can emerge between people while they surfing online.  (I don't know if enjoying surfing online is wrong but it sounds odd to say so I would leave one out or say something like 'while they are having fun surfing online')

As the time people spend on Internet is on the rise, face-to-face communication has reduced.
Face-to-face communication has gone down as people spend more and more time on the Internet.

The reduction of contact in real world may result the feelings of distance among people.
The reduction of contact in the real world may cause feelings of distance among people.

So many examples can prove this.
There are many examples which can prove this.

Obviously, Internet is totally convenience, helpful and efficiency,
Obviously the Internet is totally convenient, helpful and efficient.

but we shouldn't over rely on it to communicate, whereas we need to interact with others in our real world.
But since we need to interact with others in the the real world we should't rely on it to communicate.

So we need to learn how to use the Internet to make our lives more beautiful and wonderful, meanwhile we need to respect real people in real life.
Therefore we must learn how to use the Internet to make our lives more beautiful and wonderful.  At the same time, we need to respect real people in real life.

Thank you so much for your patience! ^^
You're doing great!  Maybe try reordering your sentences occassionally if you feel the opening phrase requires a comma.  Sometimes just putting them in the reverse order allows for a smoother sentence.  I am only guessing this because I am having the exact opposite problem when I try to make sentences in 汉语!

My guess is that the writer was using double negatives (not & un-) as a way of emphasizing how obvious the statement was that they were making about Megan Fox. It's two different ways of expressing a similar idea. (one similar to slang "It's not un-hot ", one correct "It's hot ")