First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello.sir/madam,
First please allow me make a self-introdution.My name is Crystal,coming from Guangzhou High School,Guangzhou,China.I'm honoured to have the chance to tell you something about me.
Well,when I was still in my childhood,I had a dream.I wanted to be a useful man,devoting myself to society majoring computer science.Dream in mind,I keep studying hard,and doing well in all subjects.And as a result,three years ago,I got the permisson to Guangzhou High School,which is a key one in Guangzhou city.With a high grade and good responsibility,I was made monitor of the class,as well as captain of the school dancing team
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello.sir/madam,This is pretty formal and not that common anymore. On a casual website like this, you could say
Hi everyone!
First please allow me make a self-introdution.
First, please let me introduce myself.
First, please allow me a moment to make a self-introduction.
My name is Crystal,coming from Guangzhou High School,Guangzhou,China.
My name is Crystal and I coming from Guangzhou High School in Guangzhou, China.
I'm honoured to have the chance to tell you something about me.
Well,when I was still in my childhood,I had a dream.
When I was I child, I had a dream. Or - I had a dream when I was a child.
I wanted to be a useful man,devoting myself to society majoring computer science.
I wanted to be a useful person, devoting myself to society and majoring in computer science.
In this context, man would be read as 男 so use person instead.
Dream in mind,I keep studying hard,and doing well in all subjects.
With this dream in mind, I keep studying hard and doing well in all subjects.
And as a result,three years ago,I got the permisson to Guangzhou High School,which is a key one in Guangzhou city.
Three years ago, as a result of my hard work, I was given permission to enter Guangzhou High School, which is one of the best schools in Guangzhou city. (Probably 'I was admitted to Guangzhou High School is more appropriate if there was an application process before enrolling in the program).
With a high grade and good responsibility,I was made monitor of the class,as well as captain of the school dancing team
Since I was a responsible person and had high grades, I was made both monitor of the class and captain of the school dancing team.
Good work!
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