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Dear 〇〇,

I hope you do not mind my contacting you out of the blue.

My name is Miwa 〇〇, and I live in Japan.

I was referred to you by a colleague of my friend, ○○, who thought that you might be willing to help me with my job search when I told him that I am thinking about changing my job.

I’d very much appreciate your help and advice.

To introduce myself briefly, I am currently working in the Logistics Department of figurines. Before I was transferred to the position, I bought previously owned goods such as branded items and precious metals.

The reason I chose the company is because it developed BOP business which improves the living standard of the people in developing countries through business.

I really felt like being involved in the business when I learned about it at university, which led me to interning in South Africa.

Recently, I took a look at myself and realized that I was categorizing what I’m interested in into a job framework.

Looking back at the experiences I felt were worthwhile in the past, it feels like what I actually like is to support people by their side.

With this in mind, I feel that □□(company name) supports athletes and seems exciting and matches my interest areas and career goals.

It’s been <s>also</s> on my mind for a while since my company is one of the sponsors of □□ in Japan.

I know you are busy and it's not your job to answer requests for advice, however, I would appreciate any pointers or suggestions you might have about my job search.

Thank you for your valuable time.

Kind regards,

Miwa 〇〇

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※It's an email to ask for advice and I haven't seen the job description <s>scription</s> yet

I know it's very long, but it'd be great if you could correct my mistakes or tell me any other ways to write it 🙏

Saturday - A good day to do nothing

Today is a nice day, I'm just at home, relaxing a lot. My<s> teenargers</s> teenagers are going out, and my wife is lying on the bed watching TV.

I'm trying to write something<s> to practice a little my English</s> to practice my English a little. It's a sunny day here in São Paulo.

<s>We ill be tomorrou the Grand Prix Formule One, with alreaday has a winer, Hamington.</s>

Tomorrow will be the Formula One Grand Prix. We already have a winner - Hamington.

São Paulo is a nice city to visit and to work in, but I hate the <s>trafic</s> traffic jams and <s>the</s> some of the drivers <s>don'h</s> don't have any manners. The<s> transport public </s> public transport here is very <s>full of people, but I love to live here </s>crowded but I love living here.

Well, after a long week, finally the weekend has arrived. Today I'm still at home, but<s> tomorrou </s>tomorrow I intend to go out with my family and to go to church. Sunday <s>usually is a good day to have hangouts </s>is usually a good day to hang out with relatives and friends. I would like to find more people to practice my language skills with here. Brazilians just speak Portuguese and when I find one, <s>generaly</s> generally the person is shy or is a <s>begginer </s>beginner in the English Language.

Taking Risks

I think people take risks every day. Accidents happen. There are young people who risk life and limb constantly doing extreme sports. For example jumping from low altitudes/ great heights. The athletes don't have much time to open a parachute. The price of any mistake or delay is too high. They run a risk of losing their health or even their life. I am sure that young people take risks more often than older people. They need adrenaline and as a result they throw caution to the wind and they even take risks for the sake of photos. People literally sacrifice themselves to make an unusual selfie. Such risky actions can result in accidents.

Other examples:

The detective was very disappointed to discover that he had been following a red herring and the case was not even close to being solved.

I thought I had guessed what present he had bought me but he had planted a red herring and I was way off track.

A red herring is a common device used in mystery and thriller stories to distract the reader from identifying the real culprit.

I also love using expressions, metaphors and similes in English.

If you are interested in learning more go to my profile and schedule a lesson with me.

EstelleR

Hi Rami! How you doing?

I am a teacher here. Why don't you book a trial lesson and we can chat and take it from there...

Looking forward to hearing from you,

EstelleR