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Online

          Everyone can get their style

Fit Garment

          Fit make up

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Online
           Everyone can get their style

           Stylize the 3d Model of yourself

Fit Garment

Taylor fit clothing
           Fit Taylor designed makeup

(I get that this you may be advertising this as a service that people can actually see themselves in clothing before they buy it online. You explain that later, but at the start there's still the question of why? why do I want to have a 3d Model of myself even if I can put any kind of clothing or makeup on it.

This is not part of the English corrections but I would have started out with the problem and then given the solution. Here you have presented the solution and then... lightly presented the problem this product solves.

Start with the problem:

You are thinking about getting a tatoo but you don't know how it will look on you. It's going to be forever so you better make sure. but how?

You are not sure about buying clothes online. You really like this nice shirt you found, but will it fit? Or will you have to send it back because it was too big or too small or not the right size in the right places? Before you buy that shirt online see how a 3d model of the same shirt will fit a 3d model of you. It'll give you greater confidence when you buy your clothes online. You'll be happy you did.

Anyway... it's your ad so you can do as you like. I was just saying it can help people understand what the product is for when you present the problem before you tell them the solution.

Check my presentation please

You can see presentation here:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BwgTkMx8NYUZWVN5d0xNWW10QUk/edit?usp=sharing

You could copy/paste wrong texts and corrections to it here
Thanks a lot

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All people will have their own 3d model

For What?

Anyone can have their very own 3d model of themselves, but ...

Why? ( or you could say, "for what reason?" or "for what purpose?")

People who do advertisements think very closely at the words in their ads because it can help or hurt their sells depending on which words they choose. Here I have corrected the English to help people understand what you are saying, but it may be more powerful if said in a different way. Just something to think about. I would have to think about the message more to give my own opinion as to what may sound better to a potential customer.

I will get to the other slides later. I had to read all of the slides before I knew how to fix the second slide.

sentences

Spaniards made a world tour for the first time in history in 1519 - 1528. But the expedition was headed by Magellan, which who was a Portuguese.
The "Flying Dutch man" is was a ship, which was wrecked sank and then floated close to the surface. The name is connected with an ancient legend about a Dutch captain.
In the USA residents are called Americans. This is the These people with are a mix of different nationalities whose forefathers - Dutch, British, Irish, Russian, Spanish, Jews, and others - migrated in to America.
Britons is are the main population in of Great Britain.
Japanese is the first nation, which suffered as the first from to suffer from atomic weapons. Yearly Japanese celebrate pay tribute to the day of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in August.
Among the Swiss, there are the most of all people speaking German, 20% of Swiss speak French, and 6% speak Italian. (You repeat words that do not need to be included to be understood. I've taken them out for you =)
The hero of the novel written by Hemingway "For Whom the Bell Tolls" is Robert Jordan, is an American. Together with the Spaniards, he fights against the Nazis and gives his life for the freedom of the Spanish people.
Millions of people of various nationalities were killed in Nazi concentration camps during the war. This These included Russian, Poles, Jews, French, Germans and people of other nationalities who were living in the occupied territories.
The first navigations of Europeans to the northeastern coast of America date back to the X th century.

Sentence from my cover letter

Also I could take a test without fee.

is it correct?

"Also I could take a test without fee." Is this a question?

Leigh's answer assumes that you don't know if there is a fee.

It sounds like you know there is a fee but you don't want to pay for it. You can ask, "Is it possible to wave the test fee?"

Let me know if this is not a question because that would affect my answer.

Please check my resume and the cover letter out

Part of resume:

Objective
Looking for a challenging job position in the as a VFX artist position to grow up strengthen my skills and experience.
Summary:
I am self motivated as well as and a good team player. I pay attention to detail and possess creative problem solving skills to overcome difficulties challenges. I am a fast learner and very adept at learning new software, techniques, and workflow.
Professional Experience:

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Cover letter:

Dear Good Man,

I am writing to express my interest in the 3D generalist position (listed on job.com) to work in the office or remotely at to freelance remotely. I have experience creating 3D graphics for post production and television companies. I dealt with I've worked on films, television projects and commercial projects.

My responsibilities included creating the CGI shots and sometimes supervising outdoors. (What does it mean to supervise outdoors? Are you supervising live action?) 

List of my skills and software I use:
Maya: 3D modeling, rigging, setup, animating, rendering, MEL scripting and writing expressions, cloth and particle simulation
Zbrush: sculpting
Mudbox: texturing
Photoshop: texturing, concept design
PFTrack: tracking, camera match moving

ALso Also After Effects: keying, rotoscoping, motion graphics, simple compositing

Here is my demo reel: <<link>>
and online version of my resume: <<link>>

Plus I have a winning smile and I LOVE cats. <-----Just a joke

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

Will Banny

Will, You sound like you have a lot of good skills and you obviously know what the tools of the trade are for a 3D generalist in the VFX industry. I play with Blender but I know zbrush has got some amazing power. I would love to see your demo reel. 

For something this important I would recommend you have more than one person check your resume. Of course your most valuable assest will be the demo reel.

Good luck with the job hunt. 

Would you be so kind to give a look here? :)

Would you be so kind and check this over? ;)

First of all, as soon as I fiercely believe that it is easier to learn a foreign language from the very beginning, I would certainly defend the advantages of the assumption that it is better to start learning a foreign language at a primary school than at the secondary one.

(this sentence needs to be split and some words taken out.)

First of all, as soon as I fiercely strongly believe that it is easier to learn a foreign language from the very beginning young age. I would certainly defend will show the advantages of the assumption that it is better to start learning a foreign language at a primary school than at the secondary one. I do think so believe this because it's a child is more likely to be a bilingual child when you he or she starts to study it in the primary school when a child is yet small. There are interesting studies about bilingual children and the adventurous characteristics of their abilities. 

The other reason why I believe in it, is that before ten years children's comprehension abilities are flexible and very active. Rather than use a study approach, you can use the game approach so that pupils study things in a game mode without accounting recognizing that it is a real study process. That's usually why usually in language schools it is so used the type of lessons when children have to play in something memorizing the new words or singing songs and so on for their lessons. Such processes make their brain think believe that it is not a study and they think it learning is not so terrible, but relaxing and interesting.

As soon as I myself have started to learn a foreign language even before a primary school, I believe that there are more advantages about to it. In At the same time I can suppose that for some children this could be a bit challenging. Maybe they can will find some it difficulty in to accepting a new language and need more time to adapt themselves to it. Or maybe there are other reasons which that I have no knowledge do not know about. Anyway But for the most part, I would insist argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Here you go Ira, good job!

day #3

It's Saturday! I had a very good day at school. English lesson was very boring today... :|
For At the moment I'm waiting for my friend who had to come to me was suppose to meet up with me 3 hours ago but she's always late!

P.S. Please, correct my errors. Thank you.

I found this advice online about "At the moment" vs "For the moment". I think it's good advice. I had to think for a moment to see if i was giving you the proper one to use. Hope it helps, you are doing great. =)

"at the moment = now and ongoing.

eg I am studying chemistry at the moment ... AND ...next I will so something else

For the moment = now while waiting for something

I am living with friends for the moment ( BUT will get a place of my own as soon as possible)

I am happy at the moment = I am in the now and life is good

I am happy for the moment = life is OK but I know it is going to go all wrong again, just as it always does

re previous sounding wrong, if you finish the sentences, there is a difference in nuance:
I can't see you at the moment. Goodbye, call me later.

I can't see you for the moment, but I'll see you sometime soon when I am free." -Thar

Castle in the sky

My friend advised me to watch recommended I watch “Castle in the sky” about two days ago. But I haven't watched seen it only until today and I wanna want to write about it here in my notebook.  about it.
Actually, I actually like anime, but so I don’t know why I have not watched it earlier sooner. Whatever…
I liked “Castle in the Sky”. Especially, some scenes. In the first, it’s there is a fight scene. It was really amazing. Then I liked pirate’s family: grandpa, the sons and  the Captain, who's the mother, and her sons. They were kind to Sheeta and Pazu.