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First of all, as soon as I fiercely believe that it is easier to learn a foreign language from the very beginning, I would certainly defend the advantages of the assumption that it is better to start learning a foreign language at a primary school than at the secondary one.

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First of all, as soon as I fiercely strongly believe that it is easier to learn a foreign language from the very beginning young age. I would certainly defend will show the advantages of the assumption that it is better to start learning a foreign language at a primary school than at the secondary one. I do think so believe this because it's a child is more likely to be a bilingual child when you he or she starts to study it in the primary school when a child is yet small. There are interesting studies about bilingual children and the adventurous characteristics of their abilities. 

The other reason why I believe in it, is that before ten years children's comprehension abilities are flexible and very active. Rather than use a study approach, you can use the game approach so that pupils study things in a game mode without accounting recognizing that it is a real study process. That's usually why usually in language schools it is so used the type of lessons when children have to play in something memorizing the new words or singing songs and so on for their lessons. Such processes make their brain think believe that it is not a study and they think it learning is not so terrible, but relaxing and interesting.

As soon as I myself have started to learn a foreign language even before a primary school, I believe that there are more advantages about to it. In At the same time I can suppose that for some children this could be a bit challenging. Maybe they can will find some it difficulty in to accepting a new language and need more time to adapt themselves to it. Or maybe there are other reasons which that I have no knowledge do not know about. Anyway But for the most part, I would insist argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Here you go Ira, good job!

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First of all/ firstly,  as I firmly/strongly believe that it is easier to learn a foreign/ second language from the very beginning, I would certainly defend the ideal that it is better/ advantageous to start learning a foreign language at  primary school rather than at  secondary school  level. I do think so because it's more likely that the child will be bilingual by the time he/she finishes primary school when he/she is still young. There are interesting studies about bilingual children and of their abilities to learn.

The other reason why I believe this, is that before  children reach ten years of age their  brains are flexible and very active and their ability to comprehend is greater than that of older children. Rather than use the traditional learning approach one/you can use the play/games approach/method so that pupils study subjects  in a fun environment without realising that they are actually learning. That's why  language schools usually use this type of lesson so that  children  play games or sing songs that assist in memorizing new words  and so on. This process makes their brain think that it is not study but  a game, making it relaxing and interesting.

As  I  started to learn a foreign language  before  primary school, I believe that this was even more beneficial to me. At the same time I  suppose that for some children this could be a bit challenging.   Some may have  difficulty in accepting a new language and may need more time to adapt themselves to it. Or maybe there are other reasons of which I am not aware. Anyway, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.