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TOPIC: In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

A multitude of local stores has have recently closed as the result of the increasing number of high-rise and modern shopping malls which changes their customer shopping behavior. I believe this development is benificial beneficial (slight spelling error) because it helps to reduce city sprawl and create a viable solution to control store owners.

On the one hand, the vertical development can prevent the city expansion and save the countryside. There are more spaces available to build new houses and other facilities, given that separate local shops are gathered into one large building. Therefore, using the green line land to deal with the problem of lacking spaces, such as the housing crisis, is inevitable. For example, according to a recent survey, the housing price in China is more stable since the government encouraged all local sellers to move into shopping malls.

On the other hand, centralization is the best way to control shops, because the shop owners have to follow the building rules such as an opening and closing time, the condition of the store and the type of products allowed to sell. This will minimize the problem of fraudulent products and charges, which might happen in local shops, and increase the quality of customer experience. For instance, Vietnam has reduced halved the number of reports about fraudulent products by half  (what you had made sense, it just sounds more natural this way) since its attempt to centralize all the local sellers into one shopping center.

In conclusion, although many small local stores are forcing being forced to close because of due to customers preferring to shop in the change in customers shopping direction toward (sounds more natural this way) shopping centers and malls, I believe this is a positive change since it could prevent the urbanization* and help governments control the quality of products selling in those stores.

*You can write 'prevent the urbanization of green land' instead, it just depends on what you want to say.

It may be worth changing 'prevent' to 'reduce' as you can't really prevent urbanization and you have already stated that the land would be used for houses instead of shops.

My friend's introduction. Please correct it.

I studied Chinese for a year in Japan and came to Taiwan.

Then, the book I recommend is elephant man.
The synopsis of this book is ; there is a man called elephant man because of sore-looking (sore looking what?), and elephant-like (what is elephant-like) by his sick (unsure what this is supposed to mean) who was laughed by everyone. But, fortunately, (the adverb comes first here) one day he was helped by (you can say 'got help from') doctor Frederick Treve and the people around him. It is a story about how his kind heart was opened gradually.
Reading this book, I thought he was (make sure you don't mix tenses) a really strong person.
If what we see in the human eye is not an appearance, (comma needed here for grammatical correctness)  but an embodiment of the heart, I think that the embodiment of the people who call him elephant man is in a much more euphemism (not sure what you're trying to say here, but euphemism isn't the right word. A euphemism is a kinder/softer way to say something so that is sounds less bad than it is.) than his appearance.
It may be difficult to treat all people equally, but I want to be such a person.
This book also being made into a movie, so I will see it again.

Four seasons of Kyoto
State of playing badminton
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The drone industry (Part two)

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It is very difficult to argue that the pleasure of flying a drone should outweigh the potential damage to society of their uncontrolled use. But step back and look at the bigger picture. The business of drones is among the most promising, as long as the bad guys are hindered without undermining their many beneficial uses.