Check my essay please. Part second.
Write about the fate of Oliver Twist.
The novel known as “Oliver Twist” narrates about a little and poor boy with a complicated fate. The story takes place in England at the beginning of 19th century. That time was full of crime and poverty.
The story starts with a tragedy. Oliver never has seen and remembered his mother because at birth he lost her and at once was sent to a workhouse. There the kid feels constant hunger and cruel attitude all the time he there. One day he asked for more food and after that incident the caretakers decide that it was enough to send him out of the workhouse.
After Oliver finds himself in a coffin maker’s office. Here conditions a little bit better than in the workhouse. Relationships between Oliver and a main apprentice doesn’t go well in that office. And in one day occurs a fight inter guys and the child takes a decision to move to London.
In the big city he meets on his way a young guy Jack Dawkins known as the “Artful Dodger”. Jack is a talented pickpocket and member of the one criminal gang. Dodger introduces Oliver to the elderly leader of the gang Fagin.
Fagin teaches kids how to steal secretly wallets from right-minded citizens. But Oliver so kind boy that he doesn’t understand what is going on.
In the same time the main character meets with a cold-blooded murderer and robber Bill Sykes and with a girl Nicky. Oliver and that young lady feel something common between them and start to talk often.
After a while the gang robs one gentleman and the police comes immediately. All guys run away and leave Oliver at the scene of the crime. The robbed man is imbued of boy and decides take him his house. Since he met that man Oliver’s fate changes cardinally. Many bad and good things happens with the kind little boy but despite everything in the end he finds family and happiness.
The novel known as “Oliver Twist” narrates the story of a little and poor boy with a complicated fate. The story takes place in England at the beginning of 19th century. That time was full of crime and poverty.
The story starts with a tragedy. Oliver has no memories of his mother because she died in childbirth and he was immediately sent to a workhouse. Oliver feels constant hunger and suffers cruelty throughout his time there. One day he asks for more food; this was enough for the caretakers to throw him out of the workhouse.
After leaving the Workhouse, Oliver finds himself in a coffin maker’s office. Here conditions are a little bit better than in the workhouse. Relationships between Oliver and a main apprentice don't go well in the office. There is a fight between the two of them one day and Oliver makes the decision to move to London.
On his way to the big city he meets a young guy called Jack Dawkins known as the “Artful Dodger”. Jack is a talented pickpocket and member of the one criminal gang. Dodger introduces Oliver to the older leader of the gang Fagin.
Fagin teaches kids how to covertly steal wallets from law-abiding citizens. Oliver is so kind a boy that he doesn’t understand what is going on.
At the same time the main character meets with a cold-blooded murderer and robber, Bill Sykes and with a girl Nicky. Oliver and the young lady feel they have something in common and start to talk often.
Later the gang robs one gentleman and the police come immediately. All the gang members run away, leaving Oliver at the scene of the crime. The robbed man is won over by the boy and decides take him his house. After meeting the gentleman Oliver’s fate changes dramatically. Many bad and good things happen with the kind little boy but despite everything in the end he finds family and happiness.
Not bad, some agreement with verbs - notably some words (like the Police) sound singular but are plural. You've also used some very old fashioned vocabulary- cardinally, for example, rather than dramatically.
