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- ストックホルム郊外の観光 ストックホルムに帰ったし、新しいカメラを買ってし長い間観光をしてほしかった。だが、毎週とっても忙しかったか、天気は良くなかったでしたか写真を撮れまでした。結局、スエーデンの天気がいいと知られない。 なのに、最近そのような契機が現れました。今週の週末、友達とアパートの近で踏み歩いて、４時間ぐらいに近い町たちの大半を訪れました。そして、景色やの写真をたくさん撮りました。ストックホルムで日没は早く起こることが残念ながら。そして、まだ見たくところがたくさんあります。 ストックホルムの列島はとてもきれいで、見せてほしい。 https://imgur.com/a/0yOeeltFebruary 24, 201931
Our faces
After I added my photo in the profile a few people wrote to me. But nobody did before. //I have rephrased the sentence to sound easier to understand, it is also possible to group those into a single sentence. Alternatively I would have wrote that 'people started writing to me'Human face is the first and most necessary thing little child can recognize. //'necessary' and 'can' are a poor fit logically, it would sound better with 'should'
And all of the life one needs to see human faces to stay healthy psychologically. //you have mistakenly used 'health psychological' at the end. I have changed the verb as well to convey additional meaning, emphasizing that you can also become unhealthy.
But now we have "lost" our faces. We are always in on our phones and computers. Sometime in the future there will be something wrong with humanity. //once upon is a typical fairy-tale opener like a давным-давно, and implies action took place earlier, in the past. Last sentence sounds very rough, mostly because you don't back your claim or explain where it comes from. Adding 'in my opinion' or 'I think that' would make it sound a lot less arrogant :p
#moreфон2018.Have fun on italki, keep posting notes and discussion for people to correct. Speaking on a topic of your note I would bet that it has more to do with your gender :p I can bet that you will get more people writing to you if you post even lovelier smile ;)
0 votedDecember 14, 20181- I am the author of that phrase. Adam is on point, I didn't pay enough attention to what I was writing yesterday so it turned out as confusing as it did. To repeat myself I meant that I don't have a lot of free time nowadays but I would be happy to help with English, even though I can spare just few hours a week. And for the second part I should have wrote 'I want to practice my Japanese as well'.0 votedNovember 17, 20180
1st day
Today I started began using italki . (not wrong per-say, but sound much more natural in a way I rephrased it)So, I'm going to write down my introduction . So, I would like to write an introduction. (makes more sense with 'so' in the beginning)
My name is Saki .
Please feel free to call me Saki.
I'm a high school student and a second-grader . (technically correct, but more naturally 'in a second grade')
I'm good at reading English , but I am bad good at writing and speaking English. (making coma straight after a word is a nitpick, you do this mistake consistently; second part was technically correct, but I changed it so it sounds better from the style perspective, removing unnecessary repetitions)
I want to speak English fluently .(could make this one better by writing something like 'want to become able to')
I don't know what to write about here.
Anyway, if you can want to be my language partner , tell me please. (need to use proper modal verbs here, it is more natural in this situation to tell if somebody has a wish to help rather than just being 'physically' able to help)
I will keep a diary everyday here. (diary is kept for some time continuously, but you can write that you will write diary entries everyday)
Please correct this sentences.
0 votedNovember 16, 2018130-day challenge #3: Neanderthal recent studies
Recent studies on 295 Neandethal skull bones and 541 modern human skull bones from Eurasians who lived between 80,000 and 20,000 years ago(very confusing, are you trying to say that the skulls of those old remains are modern?) showed that just 39 — 14 (ranges are usualy from lower to higher, what did you try to say here?) Neanderthal and 25 modern skulls displayed signs of injury to the bone, which meant that there is no real difference between the two. Cooperatedive hunts and natural pit traps are the more most likely way Neanderthals used to keep themselves safe. On the other hand, among remains of the younger people Neanderthals were more likely to have sustained a head injury.(you are telling there is no difference earlier, this part is confusing) Among the 14 Neanderthals with injuries, 9 were under 30 years old, while only 7 out of 25 modern bones came from young individuals.0 votedNovember 16, 2018030-day challenge #1: A Geography Class for Racist People
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8WfEkXvGQhY
I have just watched this video where in which Lilly Singh, a Canadian youtuber, is teaching geography for to racists, after having received a comment telling her to come back to her country, since she is a "terrorist paki afghan indian muslim". Therefore (using therefore here does not make sense, it is used to tell that something is occurring as a consequence, so doing it like this, in my opinion, would make a person sound more petty) she reassures that her origin country is Canada Canada is her motherland (I like this more casual term more, rephrasing it this way around makes a better logical emphasis) and exhibit shows (exhibit is out of place here, point or show is better; also you want to use passive of verb here) where Pakistan, Afghanistan, and India are localized located, showing(after my previous comment demonstrating would be good alternative here) that they are actually three different countries. It is the first video of hers I watched and I appreciated it (easier verb 'like' or 'love' would be more common in here, with different shade of meaning; appreciate implies that you just evaluated it, and you are basically being 'grateful' for it). She has an ironic and sarcastic humour is being ironic and sarcastic (sounds much easier, to have humor is pretty much a fixed phrase, and with what you used humor could be replaced with sense of humor) which I pretty(pretty in here is misfit, unless you do mean it; 'pretty much' means that you barely liked it, or just liked) much liked. This situation also happens in Brazil, my native country. It is usual common to hear natives referring to other Brazilians as "that Japanese", "that Arab", "that Turkish", "that Angolan", and so on only because of some of their features. It is ridiculous, I think(swapping clauses would make more natural emphasis, would make you sound more assertive). That person is not a foreigner('Those people are not foreigners' would fit better in context). His/her Their parents or grandparents might be, but if he/she was they were born in here, he/she they must not(In situations like these shortened forms are detrimental) be attributed another nationality.0 votedNovember 14, 20180Michelle, I am no native speaker, and neither I am a particularly good at the language, but 'interchangeability' is a large overstatement here. The variant of the phrase with 'in' doesn't seem a lot of use at all. Online search reveals that average usage rates for those phrases are 300:1 on webpages is https://i.imgur.com/QCw9hHO.jpg and in written books https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=help%20you%20in,help%20you%20with&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=0&smoothing=3&direct_url=t1%3B%2Chelp%20you%20in%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Chelp%20you%20with%3B%2Cc0 it became more popular only recently . I would argue that at this point 'with' is not just more proper pattern it is more natural as well. Especially with patterns pointed out in helpful SO answer https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/59918/help-somebody-with-vs-help-somebody-in .
0 votedNovember 13, 20180
