What is it like living in Beijing （part 2 finding a job）

Graduates face a high level of competition when they try to find a fancy job in Beijing, which is partly because Beijing has most of the top schools in China, like Tsinghua University, Peking University, etc. But things can be very different only if they lower their standards. One of my classmates wants to get a position in CSR, a state-owned enterprise and the world's largest manufacturer of electric locomotives. As smart as he is, he still didn't get the job because there are 6 candidates (2 of which are from Tsinghua University) competing for 1 position. He lowered his standards and tried some other companies, and soon he received a few offers which were also very attractive.

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When you say "fancy job," keep in mind that fancy could have a negative connotation for some English speakers. It's better to say "good job" or "high-paying job" if you do not intend to mock or tease. 

Also, when starting a sentence with "but" or "because" or another conjunction, you have to make sure you have a complete sentence and not a fragment.  For example:

Fragment: Because 6 candidates were competing for one position.

Sentence: Because 6 candidates were competing for one position, he didn't get the job.

You can also reverse it and say: He didn't get the job because 6 candidates were competing for one position.

Great job. 非常好。

Attending a "Foreign Language" Class

Recently I realized that learning foreign languages by myself just does not work. No matter how many words and grammatical rules I memorize, I still can not master them without speaking which makes me feel discouraged and bored with learning. So I spent about 4,000 RMB to attend a "Foreign Language" class for 3 years. During that time, I'll be allowed to learn 5 different languages including German, Japanese, French, Korean, and Spanish. It's a good deal, isn't it? I'll attempt to learn all 5 languages as soon as possible. So fun!

Nicely done. I've never seen "crestfallen" outside a book so I changed it to "discouraged". Other than that, there were very minor punctuation and verb tense issues. 加油！ 

A happy day

I feel so happy today. First, it was snowing. I like snow because it is so beautiful. Then I received a letter that I have been waiting a long time to receive. Actually, I thought it was hopeless because it had been a long time since I sent the letter. I almost gave up, but the letter was sent to me today. How wonderful! I believe today must be a lovely and lucky day. 

Diary 24 Feb.

I was very busy for tidying up my room this morning because my new roommate will come on Sunday. My last roommate left a lot of stuff and her space was a mess. I couldn't stand it before. Although i was tired, I felt comfortable after I tidied up.

When I got home after school, my host mother told me my new roommate won't come on Sunday because she dropped out of school. And Then she folded that free bed to be into a sofa and said, "You have a living area now."

My room is big, and I will stay alone in this big room. It's not bad to stay alone. I will be quite free and relaxed.

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非常好。 我不明白“pause term”. 我觉得你的意思是“dropped out of school”。