We live in a planet full of resources with a full of diverse stunning characteristics: diversity. And this Its diversity allows to for many different species living to live together in harmony. That is why I strongly disagree with the point of view presented, stating that human needs are more important than animal needs necessities.

Firstly, both animals and humans have the right to live and it is not fair for one to have more rights over the other.  to prefer one over another. We, as human beings, can manage to achieve balance between our needs and the protection of endangered species. and We also have the responsibility to use our technology in order to fulfill that aim. For instance, now we can now build amazing houses minimizing that would minimize the impact on the environment, which is a prove proof  that there are many ways to of how we can solve this issue in an efficient and smart intelligent way. 

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