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Essay #1 Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. We live on a planet full of resources with a stunning characteristic: diversity. And this diversity allows to many different species living together in harmony. That is why I strongly disagree with the point of view presented, that human needs are more important than animal necessities. Firstly, both animals and humans have the right to live and it is not fair to prefer one over another. We, as human beings, can manage to achieve balance between our needs and the protection of endangered species and we also have the responsibility to use our technology in order to fulfill that aim. For instance, now we can build amazing houses minimizing the impact on the environment, which is a prove of how we can solve this issue in an intelligent way. Another reason is that human and animal life are codependent, hence, we must take care of our ecosystems because changes in one of these groups can lead to problems in the other. For example, the reduction of some predators causes an over population of other species, like insects, which affects the crops and ultimately has a great impact in human food resources. All in all, in my opinion, I am convinced that we can find balance in our relationship towards animals by understanding that we both have the same basic needs and that we, as human beings, have the duty to protect life, in order to leave a good legacy to future generations.

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We live in a planet full of resources with a full of diverse stunning characteristics: diversity. And this Its diversity allows to for many different species living to live together in harmony. That is why I strongly disagree with the point of view presented, stating that human needs are more important than animal needs necessities.


Firstly, both animals and humans have the right to live and it is not fair for one to have more rights over the other.  to prefer one over another. We, as human beings, can manage to achieve balance between our needs and the protection of endangered species. and We also have the responsibility to use our technology in order to fulfill that aim. For instance, now we can now build amazing houses minimizing that would minimize the impact on the environment, which is a prove proof  that there are many ways to of how we can solve this issue in an efficient and smart intelligent way. 


Hey! I think this is a very well written essay. There were just a couple things I moved around and reworded. Also, that sentence that I underlined, I was confused as to why that was put there and what you meant by it. But if you have any questions or anything, feel free to reach out. And if you like my edits and want the rest, sent me a message and I'll get back to you. Hope this helps and I invite you to check out my page for any tutoring sessions!

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