An interesting essay, I have used yellow corrections and underlined areas where I have deleted words. I hope this helps.

Eternity ( the debate)

I wrote this text today in the debate "Eternity" by Sarah.
Anyone could check it, please? Thank you.

"It's an interesting question,

I'd want a life with a sure death but in the longest term. I think the real problem is thinking about this from in our present perspective (sure death) and actual social problems such as pensions or chronical diseases.

Maybe we could be smarter and have a working system in which we could enjoy life with our elder family ( everybody will be elder or not or simply we'd have no age); maybe we could be smarter and we are able to care for and relay on the Earth to support us. Maybe we could be smarter and countries would never fight and they would share their resources. So, maybe it would be worth living a long time, but I don't believe in this dream.

However, historical facts have shown that we'd probably be more stupid and fight each other to get more and more things which would oppress us and devastate our environment and resources.

Maybe we could dream or be smarter"