Eternity ( the debate)
I wrote this text today in the debate "Eternity" by Sarah.
Anyone could check it, please? Thank you.
"It's an interesting question,
I'd want a life with a sure death but in the longest term. I think the real problem is thinking about this from our present perspective(sure death) and the actual social problems such as pensions or chronical diseases.
Maybe we could be smartest and to have a working system which we could enjoy life with our elder family ( everybody will be elder or not or simply we'd be not age); maybe we could be smartest and we are able to care the Earth to support us. Maybe we could be smartest and countries would never fight and to share their resources. So, maybe it would be worth living a long time, but I don't believe this dream.
However, historical facts have shown that probably we'd be more stupid and fight to each other to get more and more things and oppress us and devastate our environment and resources.
Maybe we could dream or be smarter"
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An interesting essay, I have used yellow corrections and underlined areas where I have deleted words. I hope this helps.
Eternity ( the debate)
I wrote this text today in the debate "Eternity" by Sarah.Anyone could check it, please? Thank you.
"It's an interesting question,
I'd want a life with a sure death but in the longest term. I think the real problem is thinking about this from in our present perspective (sure death) and actual social problems such as pensions or chronical diseases.
Maybe we could be smarter and have a working system in which we could enjoy life with our elder family ( everybody will be elder or not or simply we'd have no age); maybe we could be smarter and we are able to care for and relay on the Earth to support us. Maybe we could be smarter and countries would never fight and they would share their resources. So, maybe it would be worth living a long time, but I don't believe in this dream.
However, historical facts have shown that we'd probably be more stupid and fight each other to get more and more things which would oppress us and devastate our environment and resources.
Maybe we could dream or be smarter"
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