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WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF BEING A CELEBRITY?

Who hasn't ever dreamt to be like Madona, Beyonce or any other celebrity? Being as famous and rich as them is something we have all [ ] dreamt of. However, is being a celebrity perfect? Does it have any negative aspects?/Is it inconvenient in any way?

To start with, it is obvious that it has many advantages. Celebrities are generally richer than the average person, have money to travel and can afford whatever they want. In addition, many opportunities arise when people become famous, whether they are career related or not. Moreover, they get special treatment wherever they go, you can’t expect to be treated the same way if you are eating or being hosted/staying in the same restaurant or hotel as Cristiano Ronaldo is, right?

On the other hand, despite the common perception/conception that they have everything in life and they don’t have any problems, that’s untrue. They are human beings like the rest of us, and being [ ] famous has its drawbacks too. Lack of privacy is one of the biggest disadvantages of being a celebrity; wherever they go there might be paparazzi following them, and some fans can even become stalkers. All their life is exposed and they are constantly judged. Furthermore, being famous can involve having [ ] fake friends, so you don’t know if they really love you or if they just have something to gain or if they want something from you.

Therefore, in conclusion, being a celebrity has advantages as well as disadvantages, despite the perfect perception we have of fame/despite our perception of fame being perfect. [ ]  Not being able to enjoy a peaceful life is something not everyone can bear.

Italics: a nicer way to say something, the original is not wrong, it just doesn't sound that natural.

Bold: Necessary corrections.

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Hello,

Here's another way to correct this:

Went to the zoo / A trip to the zoo

Today the weather was very good, the sky was very blue, not even a little cloud/without a single cloud. Mom and dad took me to the zoo, there are a lot of animals there/there were a lot of animals. There are/were lions, tigers, elephants, pandas, monkeys, deer, there are/were many birds I do not know the names of, and scary snakes. We had fun all afternoon. After dinner at McDonald's, I got home at seven o'clock.

Keep up the good work!

-Charlene ;)

Hello,

You are using the verb "tackle" correctly! It seems though that you could use a little help with your phrasing :)

I think you'll find that this works better:

"At times when everything seems to be working against me, I end up quitting and I move on to something else as a way to distract myself instead of tackling my problems."

The reason: You have two options, tackling your problems or distracting yourself from them, so you are choosing one instead of the other.

However, if you want to change the sentence as little as possible, go this way:

"At times when everything seems to be working against me, I end up quitting and I move on to something else as a way to distract myself and not have to tackle my problems."

I hope this helps you,

Charlene ;)