Elle's notebook entry: Mar 17, 2011

I am young, I can wait. My dream must <strike>be </strike>come ture. I believe I can. (or "I believe it will" since you are refering to your dream).

Good job. You need to pay attention to spacing around punctuations. No spacing before and one after :-)

cheers

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am Anna. I am from Russia and I learn English language.

I am Anna. I am from Russia and I am learning English.

cheers :-)

I am happy for your friend that he managed to escape more serious injuries. I hope for a quick recovery for him.

Your text however although uses very nice words but has a few issues. Somtimes the suggested text is a correction. Sometines it is merely a matter of choice or style (i.e. not incorrect but less frequently used).

Please pay attention to your punctuations' spacing. You need NO space before a punctuation but one after it. For example (notice the period "." and how the spacing should be before and after it):

INCORRECT: I am fine .Did you hear about...
CORRECT: I am fine. Did you hear about...

A shock<s> thing</s> (or "A shocking  car accident" or "A shocking thing --...") ——car accident

I heared (“heard”) a shock ("shocking") thing about my friend yesterday, (space after ",")it is unbelievable for everbody (“everybody”). A car accident happened around me about my friend tim (this does not convey the right  meaning. Perhaps: "My friend Tim was involved in a car accident close to me"). 

it’s happened afternoon of March 10 2011. ("It happened in the afternoon of March 10, 2011")

my friend rideed (“rode”) the (“his”) bicycle <s>want</s> to <s>a</s>cross the road，(“.”) Suddenly (“there is “) a car in front of him，(“. “)He lie (“lies”) on the ground，(remove “,”) ten metres away from his car，if you are<s>stay</s> in that situation<s>，</s> you must think he cann't (“can’t” or “cannot”)  escape is (“his”) misfortune，but miracle appear，thanks the god，thanks you save him.

(You have to break the sentence above into at least 3 different sentences. Using comma is an incorrect way of attaching disjointed topics into one sentence.  And once again please note the spacing aorund it.

Tim was only a minor injuries，only need recuperate a few days.i hope he recovery health as quickly as possible

("Tim had minor injuries and only needs a few days to recuperate. I hope he recovers (or "regains his health") as quickly as possible")



keep up the good work Apple :-)

 

I absolutely LOVE Chinese food. I often go for dim sum on the weekends. Even chicken feet, duck feet, tripe, ...

mmmm. now you are getting me hungry :-)

My reason for learning ENG

I'm learning ENG because in my opinion this is the best way to get to know <strike>the cultures of others</strike> (I would say: "other cultures").

greta job Neda :-)

please help me modify thanks

My name is Xiao Fang and I am twenty-three years old ,and graduated two years ago. My major is  business management, I am working in environmental protection company, perhaps you will ask me (or "you are wondering why...") “why are you ready to leave this company”. I will give you an appropriate answer. I think everybody (or every person) has a life goal and wants to live better than other people who your friends or classmates, I am no exception. Every people know neither a free lunch nor free pies ,only ability and more hard work than other people. So I chose to leave to find a new development direction or new working environment ,because the company I am working now cann ’t give me that I want to get.
If I can be working in your company, I will work hard and study hard to get the skillse with the fastest speed for the new job .
Perhaps I am not the most suitable candidate for this job, but I will study hard to prepare myself for this job as soon as possible. thanks
please help me modify

love interests. what better reason? :-)