Could someone review my mini essay

When you become elder you more want to be more independent. When you start earn money you can provide yourself. At this point you have to choose between a highly paid job and interesting job which brings joy. In my opinion, the best option is to combine both highly paid and pleasant job, but it's not so easy at first choice of your job has to and it depends on your lifestyle. if you have a difficult financial situation or debts, the best way will be find a highly paid job. But if you have enough money and and you are interested in self-development, will find a job which brings joy. Secondly, not all people need a lot of money. Some feels better when they have enough money for living but not more. But the best way it's when when you do your hobby and get paid for it. When I find job I'll draw get attention to interesting job, because my parents will help me financially. and and I will be able to begin to develop in interesting interests for me my sphere. I asked my friend and she said:" Just find a hobby and you won't need interesting job. Do your favorites things at home and earn money at the job" Maybe she is right. Somebody things thinks that if you have a lot of money you will be happy, but I don't think so and I believe that money it's not main part of our life. Finally I want to say that eventful and happiness life depend of the on your job and if you want to be content with your life choose an interesting job.

(my humble suggestions. Regards, TAM)