Hard times

I don't know how to start this post but these 6 months have been a hell. Many things have happened and this morning came out to my mind this thought that something is sadly wrong came to my mind, not only for the situation that I'm living right now, but also because of some things that are happening in the world. I just was sitting in my bed wondering ,what is behind of a mind of conflict?, a mind thatwho uses the power to do dishonest things,. I thought about and how different dishonest people workare together to cover their backs. Things in the news that doesn't make sense to me, people fighting, suffering, dying, suicides. I'm living in a situation that I don't want to get into details of my living situation, but never in my life have I felt this kind of fear, and anxiety, including health issues due to the stress. I heard aton Linkin Park´s concert in honor ofto Chester, that his wife mentioned that mental health is as important as a physical health. I haven´t experienced anything at this level, and I pray and hope everybody experiencing a complicated situation, or someone feeling trapped in a situation, injustice, feeling like a prisoner, can find the door to get out of there. This world is full of evil and I pray and hope love can come back home, to our hearts, to our communities. If you feel sad or depressed look for supportsearch, my strength is God, family and friends, but if for something reason you feel alone, look for supportsearch, "Ask, and it shall be given to you; seek, and you shall find; knock, and it shall be opened to you.". there areis out there a lot of incredible people out there who that always want to help. Don´t feel alone, you are not.

[Hi Nadia. This is very good writing. I made some suggestions to improve the phrasing. I hope you're not struggling too much—this was a very dark post.]

IELTS Writing Test 2

Experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language atin primary school rather than secondary school. Personally, I agree with this point of view. Children can learn languages most easily many languages at in primary school because they are young and have more time.

Children are curious, they want to know everything. So, they can getacquire more knowledge. For example, children who continuously asks to their teachers about something are able to learn many words or vocabulary. I think that their native tongue is not a problem if the process of learning is adequate. For sure, it requires a commitment between parents and teachers. Child must recognize the differences between two languages.

Children are always are looking for new ways to have fun. It’s another advantage, because we must remember that we never learned our native tongue studying a lot of grammar rules. Children have additional ways to learn and they use them work it! They can learn faster playing games, listening to music, makingputting on performances and signing songs.

Opponents of this ideas reckon that the students at secondary school are better prepared tofor acquireing new language, but there is no evidence to support this point of view. However, I think that we need more research about this, because both arguments have their merits, advantages and disadvantages.

In my opinion, parents should invest more money in bilingual schools. The world is too big, and the limits of our language are the limits of our world. Learning a new language from a young age is a great advantage for theour future. So, your future self will be grateful.

[Hi David. Your English is outstanding. Because you are fluent, I edited your writing very closely, looking for small changes that would make it sound more like the writing of a native speaker. Many of your mistakes have to do with prepositions, which just take practice—they don't translate directly. In other places, I changed to a more natural word. For example, "get knowledge" is grammatically correct, but English speakers don't usually say it. We tend to say "acquire knowledge" or "learn more." Keep up the good work!]

Write&Improve

I usually use the Cambridge Dictionary because I foundfind it much better aton some points than others. There have been some occasions that I haven't found the meaning of an idiom, phrasal verb or any other word there. Some of the things that I like from this dictionary isare the examples that it provides (a bunch ofit provides many) and also the option to listen to each word in the UK or US English.

A couple of months ago, I saw another option there, which is called "Write&Improve". Depending on your level of English, you can write essays in each category that it has. I have used it twice, but now I think I'm going to be using it more often since it is becoming difficult to get corrections here.

It's interesting because sometimes you don't have any idea in mind to write about, and it provides you a diversitymultitude of ideas. For example, I just finished this one: "An autobiographical essay: My proudest moment". It also has some questions that you can follow in order to create your essay. When you finish writing it, you have to post it and automatically they show you what have been your mistakes have been.

It's another way to continue boosting your writing. Let's take a rest on italki notebook.

[Hi Luisa. Excellent work. You have a high level of fluency. Many of these sentences could have come from a native speaker. Most of the mistakes are small, and I've made suggestions to make the writing sound more "native." For example:

1) "At some points," typically refers to a time. If I say, "I was confused at some points," it means I was confused at certain moments. If you want to say that a dictionary does some things better than others, it would be better to say it's better "on some points" or "in certain ways."

2) The word "alguno/a" in Spanish can be difficult to translate into English. If you say "I haven't found the meaning of... any other word," it means the dictionary has no definitions. It's better to say "I haven't found the meaning of certain words." 

3) The word "diversity" is tricky, especially right now in America. It has a political meaning, typically relating to the ethnic makeup of a group of people. The way you used it here is technically correct, and 50 years ago no one would have seen anything wrong with that sentence. But I suggested a different word, because today "diversity" is not the word you'd use in that sentence.

Overall, outstanding writing.]

Tarea

I am going to offer the tourist program Rural Maipo., it It will be is a program located in the metropolitan region, specifically in the San Jose de Maipo metropolitan area. It's a place in the Andes Mountain, a place mystic and very mystic and natural, and will make you feel uniquealone in the world.
The tour program is performed onfollows a patrimonial traditional route, called Gran Salto Río Olivares, it's stretches has an extension to 27 km. theThe program has a duration toof 3 days and 2 nights and the principal activity will be horse riding. during 3 days forso you can get to know this patrimonial route,. theThe lodging will be in camp tents.
You can see the Andean Condor, waterfalls, flora and fauna typical of the Andes Mountain,. also you You can also share with the ranching community, that realize livestock activity in the sector, knowinglearning their customs and ways of life.
The price is 365 dollars and includes mealsMeals, horses and security equipment.,
The program does not include tents, personal equipment, trail food, or a personal first aid kit.

An UFO!

Hello everybody. I wonder if anyone has ever seen an UFO. In my case, I know that is strange, but I could seesaw one in Spain. I´m going to tell you the history.
Long time ago, in the summer of 2005, I was onat holidays in thea village of Alicante. I was with my parents and my friend Desirée. After dining in a restaurant, we were walking around the village. AtIn that moment, my father said: "An UFO!," and we laughed a lot. Nevertheless, we looked at the sky and he was telling the truetruth. There was a big UFO whichwith some colored lights! At first it was far, but it camelater nearestnearer. Finally, it went so fast so we only could see it for a few seconds.
We were so impressed, and, as I had my camera, I took a photo ofabout it. When we arrived home, my friend and I checked the photo. We realized that, unfortunately, only appeared a small point of light appeared inagainst a black background.
Since then, Desirée and I still tell this history to people, although, they likely think, we are quite crazy.
We know that it was real, but at least they laugh with our history. Who knows, perhaps they will have a similar experience in future.

And you...have you ever seen an UFO?

Thank you so much for reading it. I will be thankful if you correct my mistakes =)

HI. THIS IS VERY GOOD WORK AND EASILY UNDERSTANDABLE. MANY OF YOUR ERRORS HAVE TO DO WITH PREPOSITIONS, WHICH DON'T TRANSLATE EASILY BETWEEN LANGUAGES. FOR EXAMPLE, IN ENGLISH WE SAY "AGAINST A BLACK BACKGROUND" RATHER THAN "IN A BLACK BACKGROUND." LEARNING THE RIGHT PREPOSITION IS JUST A MATTER OF PRACTICE

ALSO, ALTHOUGH THE SPANISH WORD "HISTORIA" CAN MEAN EITHER "HISTORY" OR "STORY," THOSE WORDS HAVE DIFFERENT MEANINGS IN ENGLISH. HERE YOU ARE TELLING A STORY.

FINALLY, GETTING "A" AND "AN" CORRECT CAN BE REALLY TRICKY. MOST WORDS THAT BEGIN WITH "U" TAKE THE ARTICLE "AN." HOWEVER, BECAUSE "UFO" IS AN ACRONYM, IT TAKES THE ARTICLE "A." IT SIMPLY SOUNDS BETTER TO AN ENGLISH SPEAKER'S EAR THAT WAY.

GOOD JOB!

November rain

There were a few weeks of non-stop rainraining without stop. Not theis kind of rain strong and fast rain whichthat hurts you and makes the soil run downhill, but this soft and tender rain, nearly inaudible by the hears, nearly unnoticeable by the skin, nearly indistinguishable by the eyes which, saturating as the roofs asand the ground, [shows conceal shimmers up at all the extant things] [THERE ARE TOO MANY WORDS IN THIS PHRASE. I'M NOT SURE HOW TO FIX IT BECAUSE I DON'T UNDERSTAND. SORRY!]. The whole colour spectrum was melted into the grey scale, all the colours save greens. Have I ever dreamed with such a mixsundry of greens? Absolutely not, but they were just there, so nuanced, shinning brightly for me… The silence would washave been oppressive if there hads not been by the gurgling scuttlebuttchatter of the water bouncing down freely byalong the middle of the pebble street.
WhateverWhile I wanted to find the river, I methought it a great idea to follow the stream. I was unable to shake completely out the squeamish feeling of be walking through a ghost hamlet: no people, neithernor animals were seen. Suddenly my breath paused held on. Disclosed Revealed by the last torqueturn in the path, a stone stairway rose up before me, leading to nowhere. Skeleton winter trees grew enormous and wild on the right, bowing over the stairway as if they wanted to reach the other side, which was riddled with mossy debris and weeds. The sparkly water jumped happily, singing step by step. The autumn’s scent emanated from the ground, enveloping and transporting me to another world. If a fairy had would has flown between the branches I was notwould not have been surprised! A sweet taste flooded my mouth, and at that very moment I understood that I was in love, that I would live and die in this village.

[HI. THIS IS A VERY INTERESTING PIECE OF WRITING. I ADMIRE YOUR AMBITION—POETIC WRITING IN A SECOND LANGUAGE IS EXTREMELY DIFFICULT. I TRIED TO MAKE CHANGES ONLY WHERE YOU HAVE DEFINITELY CHOSEN THE WRONG WORD. FOR EXAMPLE, BY "SCUTTLEBUTT," I THINK YOU MAY HAVE MEANT "BALBUCEO" OR SOMETHING SIMILAR. IN ENGLISH, WE USUALLY DESCRIBE THE SOUND OF A RUNNING STREAM AS "BABBLING." BUT YOU COULD ALSO SAY "CHATTER" OR "MURMUR" OR VARIOUS OTHER THINGS. OVERALL VERY IMPRESSIVE WORK.]

Mongolian Steppe Marathon

Mongolia holdsmakes a singularunique racerunning called the “Steppe Marathon.”, hHere you can run 3, 5, 10 andor 20 km in the countryside, enjoying the green hills and the blue sky.
Many of theits contestants are japaneses, so this community also helps with the organization.
The most interesting thing isare the prizes: 1st place for mongolian people wins a horse, and 1st place among foreigners a sheep. Children and elderly categoriesy involved also are also awarded, but not with animals.

[GOOD JOB. MOST OF THE ERRORS HERE COME FROM TRANSLATING TOO DIRECTLY. FOR EXAMPLE, THE SPANISH WORD "SINGULAR" CAN MEAN "SINGULAR" IN ENGLISH, BUT MORE OFTEN IT MEANS "UNIQUE," "ODD," OR "UNUSUAL." KEEP UP THE PRACTICE AND YOU'LL SOON MASTER THESE LITTLE DETAILS.]

Real-time Data & Sports Business

According to CareerCast, one of the bestmost known job search websites CareerCast, "Data Scientist" is ranked as the 5th most -in-demand job in Canada & the USA, with a median salary of $111.267 per year and a projected growth of 16% in the next few years. In addition, Besides, "Big Data" expertise was the technical skill with the biggest increase in job demand by 2016.

But why is this happening? Why is the Industry so interested in this topic? Well...The main reason for this increase is relies on the possibility of getting a deeper understanding of human behavior through the use of data., Wwhich means, the opportunity to make more accurate and precise business decisions, reducing risks and eventually amplifying the profit margin.

In the Sports industry this information is essential and, currently, every single club, federation or sport-related brand is eager to dive into the consumer's mind. In fact, the Worldwide Sports Analytics Market is expected to grow at a Compound Annual Growth Rate (CAGR) of 40.1% during the forecast period 2016-2022, and it is expected presumed to achieve an additional growth of $3.97 billion by 2022.

Also, the sources of data are unlimited and relatively easy to collect. Nowadays, everything is connected and every process has been simplified with the use of electronic devices. In terms of costumer services we can gather a huge amount of data from ticketing, the merchandise purchase process, fan interactions onfrom social media platforms, loyalty programs, etc.

However, the problem is, how is this data stored and processed in an appropriate way? Excel sheets and pivot tables are almost obsolete in major leagues sports and all the information is now managed through the use of specialized software that which can handle real-time data to make critical decisions during a sports event. Examples of such software are Oracle E-Business, Microsoft Dynamics or SAP Hana, which bring the opportunity to analyze patterns and get real-time insights from it.

Let's take a look at the SAP HANA benefits explained for (DO YOU MEAN "EXPLAINED BY?") the New York Yankees General Manager:


Finally, we can say that Big Data is changing the world and especially the way how business is has been done before. Still, collecting data and creating insights is useless if organizations cannot convert this information into strategies that are thenm put into practice.

Next time we will be talking about different options to collect information for those sports organizations with a reduced budget and which are also interested in knowing deeply their customers.

[GOOD JOB]