Working for yourself is better than working for someone else

It goes without saying that working such as being self-employed could have more benefits than working for a superior.
On the one hand working for yourself gives you the possibility to take make your own decisions. For example you could decide how many hours to work or how you can own schedule your own work. No one would dispute the fact that you don't have a superior that order you to make something could make you do things. Moreover most of the people that work for theirself themselves can work at home in a comfortable environment without spend their money for transports on transportation.
On the other hand those who work such as are self-employed has have the risk to be of being overwhelmed with work: without fixed hours and lot of work, you can easily find yourself with work arrear (or: in debt). It is generally agreed that you have a big responsibility about for your own work. There are those who Some would argue that working for someone else gives you the possibility to have almost always a planned calendar, so you can organize your week. Nevertheless you have a superior, so you don't have the possibility to take make your own decisions and usually you have to work in a specific place, for example an industry.
To conclude, working for yourself gives you the freedom to make your own decisions.

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I would like to become a writer of short stories, and poems. Most of what i am writing is in with Arabic language, so i am trying to writing with write in English language. Between the sky and the land there is a space.......... Between the sky and the sea there is a space......... Between two minds are thinking there is a there are thoughts of special things......... Between a newborn and the death there is a life ... seeking for a smile .... a hope....... A story not like other stories from the other side .... from the land of dreams... To be continued ....!

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The Brazil is too hot, some days we have it is 40°C. It's so much too hot! Because of that, I'd like to live in a cold country. I think that is incredible weather.

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This is a great letter, you are on the right track! Below I have made a few corrections. The corrections that are highlighted in yellow are corrections that I find necessary for the letter in order to make it grammatically correct. The corrections that I have made in orange are suggestions to improve the flow of the letter, but are not necessary corrections. One quick note is about your letter closing. In a formal letter like this one, you would want to sign off with Sincerely or From or Thank you. The closing you used, Faithfully yours is quite personal for this letter. Check out this great article about letter closings for more examples: https://www.thebalance.com/how-to-end-a-letter-2062308

IELTS Letter Writing Practice - Any feedback would be deeply appreciated.

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to share my opinion regarding the survey that you published on in Tehran Daily on Monday September 25 (or whatever date this was).

From my perspective, there is no doubt that financially supporting a junior sports team can will be extremely beneficial for both the players and your business. Not only can will they the players promote your products, but they can will also be given have a chance to become professional athletes in the future. (A better way to word this sentence would be: Sponsoring a junior sports team will both promote your products and give the players a chance to enjoy a new sport.)

Regarding the open concerts, I am sure such events will raise the public spirit in the short term. It can also be an opportunity for amateur local musicians who are eager for such an occasion to prove themselves.  to perform. (Here you should add a negative side to supporting the concerts, or a reason that supporting the sports team is a better option, for example: In the long run, supporting a local sports team will be more beneficial for advertising and to the players.)

If I were to decide how to spend this money, I would certainly proceed with sponsoring the children’s team junior sports team (try and keep your vocabulary consistent). Having worked as a coach for the last 10 years, I know how much having a sponsor like you can ease the development of junior players.

I hope you will consider my ideas in your decision-making process.

Faithfully yours Sincerely,
Adib Yz.

Overall, this is a very well written letter. I did not have to make many corrections, but tried to add some extra details for you to support your argument. Make sure to keep your language consistent, for example, use the same word to describe the sports team. If you want to work more on your letter writing, I would be happy to help you! You can click on my profile and book a trial lesson and we can get started. 

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Hello! I'm Den

Hello everyone! My name's Den. I'm 23 years old. I really don't know what to say in my first letter but lets let's (let us) start. I used to live in Donetsk but now I live in Moscow  have been living in Moscow for 3 years. In the school I was a little foolish and don't didn't learned English. Now I'm an adult person and I regret that don't didn't started it before. I like to live living in Moscow so much but this is a very expensive city. I would like to learn English in a special school and I hope this will happen. Now I learn it by myself (Or: Now I teach myself). This is hardly to understand what I was missed for in my school years. I know this letter is so primitive and you saw have seen a hundred letters like mine. I have just started and I hope my English will be better step by step.

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