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Argumentative Writing Practice: Should University Students Bear all the Costs of Their Studies

Topic: Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There has long been an argument as to who should pay the bills of  for university studies?. While I admit that other parties such as the governments need to do their part in solving some  these difficulties, I reckon that it is still the students’ job to shoulder the major part of the cost, if not all.

It is true that without the support from other sources, it would be hard for many poor students to realize their dream of higher education. Individuals and organizations are not obliged to offer help, so it is mainly expected that governments should play a bigger role. This is because that a country as a whole would benefit from having a pool of professional in the long run. An investment on in talents tends to gain returns as we are now in an age of a knowledge economy rather than the one depending on physical labor.

In spite of this, I believe students should nonetheless be the main financial contributor of to their own studies. For one thing, it is unviable to pin all the hopes on governments to fund university studies. As we know, higher education institutions spend costs a lot on facilities,  and equipment, as well as payrolls of for teaching staff. If governments also have to take the responsibility of the tuitions into their hands, it might not be sustainable for long, except for in the very rich countries. For another, since students themselves are the prime beneficiary of university education, it is unfair to spread their cost to other people whose tax money is used to support their education. University graduates usually earn a much higher income than those without such a diploma. Therefore, it can also be seen as a personal investment that might offer handsome returns for themselves instead of others.

In conclusion, I believe that the recipients of higher education ought to be the ones to pay for their future gains.