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I've always loved our ability to convey meaning through our variegated languages. I constantly strive to improve that ability. Every day's another chance at enrichment! I speak English and Русский, and am learning Français and Deutsch (at least, so far!) --- Bonjour! Je m'appelle Nicole. J'ai vingt-et-un ans et je suis une étudiante en littérature à une université aux États-Unis. Je me concentre toujours sur améliorer mes écrits et mes dessins! Chez moi, j'ai un chat qui j'adore beaucoup. Lorsque j'étais plus jeune, j'étudiais le français. J'ai commencé l'étudier quand j'avais dix ans. Totalement, j'ai l'étudié pendant six ans (2007 à 2013). Mais il y a cinq ans que j'ai arrêté (parce-que aujourd'hui nous sommes en 2018)! Ça me rend triste (car j'aime le français!); donc je veux essayer de commencer l'étudier encore une fois! --- Hallo! Ich heiße Nicole und ich bin zweiundzwanzig Jahre alt. Ich bin eine Studentin, die studiert Anglistik. Ich schreibe Geschichte gern und mache Zeichnungen gern, wenn ich Freizeit habe. Ich habe zu Hause eine Katze, die ich sehr liebe. Während der letzten zwei Jahre, ich lerne Deutsch in meiner Universität. Aber ich denke, dass mein Deutsch nicht gut ist, weil ich nur wie das Lehrbuch meiner Universität sagt mit meinen Klassenkameraden spreche. Ich will mein Deutsch besser machen!
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    June 13, 2018
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    It so happens that of all (consider: out of all) the monstrosities of thought which we find (this isn't incorrect, it just makes the sentence more confusing than it needs to be) in the whole of the Greek cultus Grecian cultus (compare with Paris cultus versus Parisian cultus), the most monstrous are those which originated with originated from (when you say "originated with," you're saying that both Plato and these thoughts originated at the same time. I think you're trying to say that the thoughts "originated from" him, rather than with him) Plato."

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    When you're talking about the Grecian cultus, you're talking about the Greek's particular system of religious worship. Writing "in all (of) the Grecian cultus" would be a bit redundant. Writing "in the whole Grecian cultus" is also a bit redundant. By "Grecian cultus" you've already referred to the entire Grecian cultus; saying that "of all the monstrosities of thought in the whole (or entirety) of the Grecian cultus" would make most sense. However, I think the same meaning can be conveyed with "of all the monstrosities of thought within the Grecian cultus". Sometimes, simplicity conveys your meaning best. 

    There's also some confusion here: "the most monstrous are those which ... " for you're referring to thoughts ("the most monstrous [thoughts]") but your previous phrasing ("the monstrosities of thought") suggests monstrosities instead, leaving your reader with another interpretation ("the most monstrous [monstrosities]"). This isn't incorrect, but I'm not sure if this meaning is what you intended. I'd recommend instead simplifying to "the thoughts ... the most monstrous".

    Ultimately, I'd recommend your final sentence be: "It so happens that of all the thoughts within the Grecian cultus, the most monstrous are those which originated from Plato."

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    June 13, 2018
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    A Letter of Complaint

    Dear Mr.Smith, Mr. Smith, (Always put a space after a period, a person's title is no exception.)

    I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the unacceptable living conditions at the dormitory of your national park (consider at your national park's dormitory).

    Although I really appreciated the job appreciate having worked in your national park, the living conditions were terrible. Firstly, hot water was available only in some cases sometimes (consider was only sometimes available [putting sometimes before available puts greater emphasis on how limited the hot water's availability was). Moreover, cold water was not available sometimes. At times, even the cold water was not available (or unavailable). (There's no need to put "Moreover" here as you're still talking about the availability of the water.)

    Secondly, there was no heating and it was , making it really cold in our room ("and" connects two different statements, but "it was really cold in our room" is a direct consequence of "there was no heating"). And finally, the size of the room was inedaquate inadequate for eight adults. There was not sufficient space for living.  This made it very difficult for us to live comfortably. or Our living conditions were not at all comfortable. (In the previous sentence, you already said that the "size of the room was inadequate". Instead of repeating yourself and saying "there was not sufficient space for living," you should focus on the impact on your living conditions.)

    I must urge you to (consider that you instead) consider finding find (this sounds more firm) a solution to this problem as soon as possible.

    Yours sincerely, (consider Sincerely, to end on a more serious note)
    T.
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    You did well with the formal language in this letter; it conveys the seriousness of your complaint without making you sound discourteous. 
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    June 8, 2018
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    italki didn't allow me to submit this correction as one message, I'm sorry! D: 

    Part 1:

    Absolute Power Corrupts Absolutely 

    The proverbial saying "power corrupts" (single quotes are only used within double quotes, "Like 'this'.") conveys the opinion that, (no need for a comma here) as a person's power increases, their moral sense sense of morality diminishes (consider decreases instead). But is that really the case? Power means that With power, a person can get other people to do things for him or her. He or she gets comfortable with that. The more power he or she has, the more he or she thinks he or she can get away with stuff. People with power get arrogant. (Writing "he or she" isn't necessary, but it's more neutral. Also consider "one".)

    Also, there is the problem of trying to hold on to power. The worst thing that can happen to a person in power is to lose it losing that power or the loss of that power (you can't use "it" because "in power" is not the same thing as "power"). Absolute power may conjure up dictators who have no checks and or balances. The dictator becomes more and more (consider increasingly) corrupt as he finds it easier to do the immoral things he needs to do to hold onto power.

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    June 6, 2018
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    Part 2:

    Nevertheless, do not dismiss the importance of nature, attitude and education. Not all powerful people are corrupted. If a person values truth, justice, and equality above all, then no power should can or would be able to change him for the worse (this isn't wrong, but it's also not necessary).

    To sum up To sum it up or, more formally, In sum, power is (consider poses) a serious test and no less a serious temptation. Thus, this it is primarily an abstract concept, used to describe a privilege given by some people to others. By itself, it does not change anything. It depends only on the person and on how he will dispose of it uses it at his (or her) disposal, and only the person is responsible for their his (or her) ("person" is singular. Many people use "they" and "their" but it is incorrect) actions.

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    Overall, these paragraphs flow well in thought and in writing. You did a good job with this!

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    June 6, 2018
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    June 6, 2018
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    Schlafen oder nicht, das ist die Frage Es ist jetzt drei Uhr fünfundzwagzig, aber ich noch nicht schlafe. Meine Katze schlafe neben mir, wie sie schlafe jeder Tag. Diese Morgen am neun Uhr ich muss nach meine Arztin gehen. Ob ich jetzt schlafe, weiß ich nicht, wann ich aufwachen werde. Ich habe Angst, wenn ich spät werde. Deshalb denke ich, vielleicht es besser ist, ob ich schlafe gar nicht. Aber ich bin zu müde zu schlafen nicht. Meine Augen sind müde auch. Ich esse weiße Schokolade und denken über diesem Probleme mehr.
    June 6, 2018
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    There are many, many uses for those prepositions. You didn't specify the exact meanings you're having trouble with, so I'll address their simplest differences. Consider these sentences: Elle vient en bus. She's coming/She comes by bus. Mon anniversaire est en novembre. My birthday is in November. Il met son stylo dans sa trousse. He puts his pen into his pencil case. Je trouve mon chat dans la boîte. I found my cat inside the box. Nous allons à la bibliothèque. We're going/We go to the library. Vous regardez à gauche. You look to the left. Dans is the easiest to distinguish: it denotes that something is inside or within something else. So you're not speaking "dans le français" or "inside the French". À denotes physical location or destination. So you're not speaking "à le français" or "to/at the French". En denotes how/by what means, when, and where (generally, can be, but doesn't have to be physical). So you're speaking "en français" or "in French". I think that's the easiest way to differentiate them. There are many other nuances and dozens of rules and specific situations that apply only one of these prepositions, but you'll pick those up along the way as you practice French. I'd recommend listening to songs, audio clips, etc. to get a feel for how each preposition is used. Eventually, you'll intuitively be able to select the proper one. Hope this helps!
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    June 6, 2018
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    If you're talking about cutting an image in the middle into two equal parts, then there are many words you can use for the phrase. I think it's best to be simple: "Cut [the image] vertically in half/into halves". You can write 2, but it isn't as clear as half/halves (because "in half/into halves" implies into two equal parts). 1. Cut vertically in half 2. Cut horizontally in half I hope I interpreted your question correctly!
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    June 6, 2018
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    Part 3:

    Well, Thanks thanks.

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    Omar, you do have some errors with verb tenses when they're in the past or future and with prepositional phrases, but overall your writing comes across clearly! It's really good to have a positive attitude like you do, especially after a setback (like your job interview). I hope you can get a job soon — keep on trying and don't give up!

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    June 6, 2018
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