No, that doesn't make sense without the him. It doesn't sound right without it.

I'm not sure what you mean by approciate. Do you mean appreciate? If so it can be either option, but I think IT sound better.

I started italki.

Hi. I'm Japanese.
I started italki to want to learn english.
And, I would like to teach Japanese to people who want to learn Japanese.
Thank you.

What are the mistakes in this text?

I've been told that this text is full of mistakes and that I can't speak English fluently. Please help me to know my mistakes.

"I am a Mexican translator working and I have been working since 2014. I study English Philology [I'm not sure what you mean by Philology] as well.

For companies, I work translating contracts, product descriptions and safety, quality and industrial procedures manuals. When freelancing, I translate medical documents and any subject among my interests.

My interests: foreign languages, video games, literature, medicine, sports, music and traveling.

I can speak German and I am learning Japanese".

SO SAD

Today, we were eating lunchn(our family), and then, my dad said, I have lost my job. At first the noise we suddenly became quiet down to hear the news. It was shocking for our family...I don't know how to express my mood feelings. But this is not bad, he just lost his job, the most important thing is that we can be together. I should look on the bright side.Everything will become better. Smile 

The principal opposition.

Present tense.

About a month later, the time has come to play with Green Rovers FC. We've not lost any games during the last month and the season at all. Three wins and one draw is a wonderful result. What about our opponents? I suppose that will be an interesting match. Billy Bright is serious before the match. An interesting view shows to us. [Not sure what you meant with this sentence] Bill left Championship to join an amateur club, some time later Harris Holmes did the same thing. They play in the same division again.  Moreover Holmes declared in an interview for a local newspaper that he is going to get the local cup. As I expected the accident happened right away during the match. I won't tell you about it, but both teams played ten on ten in the second time. Bright and Holmes were sent off in the fifty third minute. Full time 0-0. The story just begins.
Now we are in the pub, getting some rest after the game.
"So what happened between you and Holmes, Bill? I mean when you played in Championship." I ask him.
"It's very long story, Damien. If I tell you it right now no one will correct this entry." Billy says to me with a happy smile and the lange "flashlight" on his face.

Today's life

I got up late this morning, and went to the convenience store to buy breakfast. I bought two loaves of bread. I was so hungry. I ate both of them. After finishing my breakfast, I went to the station to wait for the bus. I was afraid of missing the bus. Fortunatelly, I got on the bus. One hour later, I went to my company. Today's work was very boring. I feel tired today.

Thus is not usually used in conversation nowadays, but I think it has the meaning similar to therefore. It's often used in more formal context like you said in academic texts.