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    Thoughts about the history of "Dating"

    This video <s>is </s>talks about "dating", and in my mind, it represents the process of people fighting for freedom, especially as a women living in a <s>men power social </s>patriarchal society.

    <s>In </s>For a long time, a woman <s>can't </s>couldn't love<s> with</s> a man without her family's agreement. Also she <s>will </s>would be punished <s>in a </s>mentally and physically <s>ways, </s>if she got divorced. Even today, there still exists a punishment named "honor killing" in some religious countries. Men <s>has</s> are in the same situation, where people are treated as <s>a source</s> resources, not <s>a </s>as humans.

    People want to take back<s> the</s> control of themselves. They start <s>to</s> by being responsible for their own feelings and bodies, <s>they</s> and respecting each other's different growth paths<s> of each other</s>, and as a reward, people get the freedom of choice between love and not love, love with the same gender and <s>the</s> a different gender. Actually, the system of marriage has had a huge revolution accompanied by the development of the times; divorce is allowed, cohabitation partners also have <s>a </s>legal validity in some countries, and an open relationship is also possible in a marriage.

    Referring to these facts, I have a positive prediction <s>about the future</s> that we won't stay with somebody just following the commands of AI. We can't live as<s> a</s> living machines; Love and the will<s>ing</s> inside ourselves are the most important things. After all, the <s>meaning</s> purpose of <em style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">1984</em> is to warn us, not to teach us as a manual.

    rf: https://www.voicetube.com/videos/70312

    Nice essay, Gin! I really liked reading about your thoughts, and you get some complex ideas across with sophisticated language. Most of the errors are just about plural/non plural form, tense agreements, and the use of 'a' or 'the', but they don't get in the way of understanding what you are trying to express.

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    November 13, 2019
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