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Smartphones have become a necessity in daily life. There are arguments that using these devices make people less intelligent and due to them, people are increasing their dependence on technologies and not their brain. This essay will give the reason as to why this I <s>totally </s>completely agree with this idea.

People are losing their mathematical abilities due to the usage of <s>cellphones </s>technology. Nowadays, people tend to use their device for almost everything including arithmetic operations. A report showed that in Mexico<s> the , </s>majority of the high school students rely <s>so much</s> on their smartphones even to make<s> some</s> simple calculations. The youth argue that they are no longer able to solve simple problems using their logic and reasoning because they are already used to the calculator on their cellphone. With this evidence, it is clear that people are losing part of their skills because of<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 102);"> the</s> technology.

Moreover, organisational issues are evident as well because of technology. People make a lot of mistakes when they do not count with their cellphone. For example, office workers most of times have the agenda on their device, such as meetings, visits, trips, e.t.c. due to their busy schedule, and remembering all the events is not possible. There is a survey that was carried out in England, asking 100 administrative employees about how would have been a day in the office without a cellphone to<s> do</s> plan our activities, and <s>the </s>almost all of them commented that their memory would have collapsed. This is another argument showing that technology has an unfavorable effect on people.

In conclusion, human intelligence is decreasing as a result of development in technology. This essay argued that the negative impacts of <s>the </s>smartphone usage are<s> actually</s> real.

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2019.05.15.

Mom came home to see my son Jihan. She is seeing him almost after a month. She drove here herself. It takes many hours to come here. Mom brought a guitar and played some songs. Jihan seemed interested in the guitar. He tried to touch it and was amazed to hear the sound. Mom said there will be a concert with people who learn together so she practices hard every day.

If i could start my college life again

Good evening! judges and students, I am <s>the speaker</s> Emily from business English class two. It is a great honour to stand here and give you a short speech. My topic is if I could start my college life again.

If I could start my college life again, I would first get a better understanding of myself. Not knowing myself has led to confusion and waste of too much time in the past. I have gone through each day reacting to events and just getting by rather than making conscious choices based on who i am and what i want. Now i am aware of the significance of knowing myself. A better understanding of myself is the first step to lead me to better decision making, setting and reaching appropriate goals and altogether living more productively. If i could start my college life again. I would foster an optimistic attitude towards my future. When i was a freshman, i was always worrying about my future, which made me rather depressed and has cost me too much time. Now I have learned that it's your attitude ,not your altitude that counts on your way to success .Difficulties in life and career turn out to be weak enemies that can’t withstand our active counterattack . If I could restart my college life,i would always keep my chin up. If i could start my college life again,I would say no to the temptations around me like TV series,shopping,movies,computer games and so on. A scientist once did an interesting experiment. He gave children some candy. Then told them that those who do not eat candies before he came back, will get more candy. After that, he hid outside the door and observed the children. Quite a few rejected the temptation and were rewarded with more candies.<s>even </s>If children can reject the temptation, why can't i ? Bad temptation is like a virus, we need to fight against it, with scientific attitude, strong will, sober mind and correct method, to get rid of its interference and avoid its harm to us. If i could ..,I would not make <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 102);">the</s> wrong choices anymore and my life would be completely different. However, all of the above started with an if..which means i can not restart, but i don't think that it is too late to correct my mistakes and <s>arrange</s> (work harder towards my future?) my future life in a better way.

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Successful people

Nowadays, in occidental countries, it is really important for people to be successful. Some years ago, it was enough to get a job which allowed your to earn money and you could make ends meet. However, currently people want to work in a big company, where they earn more money. They wish to have a huge house and travel around the world.

That idea that we have about a successful person makes that we work really hard during all our life.

Although, when we have the job that we wanted <s>to get</s>, we are happy only for a few months. Later, we start to think that we must get a promotion, because we will earn more money. And finally, we think that the more money we earn the more powerful and happier we will be, but it is never enough.

As a consequence, we don´t enjoy our success.

In my opinion, successful people must work hard and never give up, but they must never forget to enjoy. Enjoying the process, enjoying free time with their friends and family. These things will make you happy and motivated to go on managing new successes. Or perhaps, you realize that you are a successful person and you don´t need to do anymore.

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Hello, my name is Séverine.

I'm thirty years old.

I live in Arcachon, near Bordeaux.

I have a cat, his name is Eclipse and he's black.

I'm a waitress at an Italian restaurant.

My favorite animal is the Orca. I like<s> the</s> whales and dolphins too.

I travel around the world <s>for</s> to see them.

I was in Norway, the Azores, Madere and Faro.

My favorit sport is<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 204);"> the</s> biking.

I have a sister, her name is Amandine.

She is forty two years old.

She has three children.

Two girls and one boy.

She is a cashier.

Her husband's name is Cedric.

My favorite celebrity is Cristiano Ronaldo because he's strong, beautiful and a generous man.

Hello Sevvalll, I can help you with your English if you are interested.

You can send me a message.