Importance of learning English
Learning English will bring you many benefits.
For example, we will be able to communicate with foreigners and experience various cultures.
In addition, we will enjoy traveling abroad. This is because we ??can get more information in foreign countries. ??
Moreover, it is said that Japanese can't speak English. So if you could speak English, you will get some ??advantages.??
Comments:
Good work on this notebook entry, it displays good control of the English language's grammar and vocabulary. Main areas of improvement:
1)Consistent use of modality. The entry started with "will" (high modality), but moved to can/would (lower modality). Considering this is a persuasive argument, use high modality words, a.k.a will, must, definitely etc, throughout your writing.
2) Vague phrases. In the phrases with question marks, clarify what you mean. Provide more information, i.e. "what information" and "what advantages". State explicitly what you mean.
3)Word choice. Not that big, just "experience" is a better word to use. Just practice more XD
Keep up the good work.
