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Movie Review —Forrest Gump
Although we have so many advantages in our life, why we still cannot do anything as successfully as Gump. I think these three people who were just like three important elements in his life led him to achieve his objects. Gump's mother tried her best to afford him to go to the public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful parts in the movie, in order to let her son accept education like normal students rather than lose on his childhood. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love is for her children. Jenny, who was Forrest's beloved woman through his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: Run, Forrest, run! Run, Forrest, run! From then on, he got used to insist on running no matter what he did and where he was. He kept on running in every football games and became a football star. He kept on running in the wars and became a hero. He kept on running when he began to engage in business and became a billionaire and everyone's idol in America. It is just a simple thing for most people to run but hard to persist to do it sincerely and devoutly toward the goal. Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp and asked Gump to join with him after the war. Gump promised him to do it. Unfortunately Bubba died in the war and left Gump alone to fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise no matter how difficult it was and what challenges did he met in business. I think these three person are just one of the important parts in Gump's life. But, all in all, the most important factor is Forrest Gump's spirit of fearlessness, kindness, faithfulness which are also invaluable gifts that the movie want to bring to us.Hello, i leave my correction here... unfortunately i had to change the way you said some things, because it was hard to understand the meaning at the beginning so i took the liberty to correct all the paragraph in a better way, the things you have to improve are connection words, how to use the past, present, and future, i may have some mistakes but i think is fine the way i put it so check the paragraph out and ask me if you have any question.
Even though we have so many advantages on our lifes, we still can not do things as successfully as Forest Gump did. I believe there were 3 people that were important elements in Forest Gump's life, those 3 people guide him to the achievement of his objectives. Gump's mother tried her best so he can afford him to go to the public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful part in the movie, in order to let her son receive education like normal students rather than lose on his childhood. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love can be. Jenny who was Gump's beloved woman through his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: "Run, Forrest, run!, Run, Forrest, run!. From that point on his life he got used to insist on running no matter what he did or where he was. He kept on running be it in football game, war or a business. As simple it may seem "to run" for most of the people is hard to persist to do it sincerely and devoutly. Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp and asked Gump to join him after war. Gump promised him he will do it. Unfortunately Bubba died during the war and left him alone so he can fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise, it didn't matter if it was difficult or there were any challenges in the business. I believe those 3 were one important part of Forrest's life. In spite of all difficulties of Forrest Gump's life the things that were the most important part of him were his spirit of fearlessness, kindness, faithfulness which are also invaluable gifts that the movie wanted to bring to us.
0 votedOctober 4, 20160"I'd like to travel around the world
Hi everybody I'm giada and I'm from Italy.
I love speaking in English and I would like to increase my skills. My biggest dream is to travel around the world, meet new people and visit new countries. Since I was a child I've wanted to learn languages which can help me to realise my dream so now I'm studying hard to achieve my dreams and become the person i've ever wanted to be."Correct form:
Hi everybody, I'm Giada and I'm from Italy.
I love speaking in english and I would like to increase my skills. My biggest dream is to travel around the world, meet new people and visit new countries. Since I was a child I've wanted to learn languages because they will help me to realize my dream, so i've been studying hard to achieve my dreams and become the person I've always wanted to be.
Errors:
When say "Hi everybody I'm Giada" you've got to write a coma between "everybody and I'm" why? because it'll take another meaning if you don't write it.
On the following sentence "Since I was a child I've wanted to learn languages which chan help me to realise my dream" you've can put the "can" but it don't fit quite well in the sentence, from what i can understand about your text, i think it will be better if you write "because" instead of "which can" because you are giving an explanation about the thing you want to do, an other error in the sentence is the word "realise" because the correct way to write it is "realize".
On the following sentence "so now I'm studying hard to achieve my dreams and become the person I've ever always wanted to be." there are a few mistakes, i going to write the correct answer and after that i'm going to highlight the mistakes you made.
The correct form of writing it is:
", so i have been studying hard to achieve my dreams and become the person i've always wanted to be."
You have to write "have been" to tell the person you've been "doing something" and will continue to doing it.
If you have any question just ask, i can help with english and spanish...:D
0 votedOctober 4, 20162- Both are correct and their meaning is the same... why? because in the first one you are saying implicitly "how does a person enter the car without the keys to open door?" and the word that you are using instead of that phrase is the word "in". For the second one is the same thing you use the word "into" instead of "in". I don't know if you know what am i saying... but if you have any question and you consider that i can help you ask, send me a message ok?0 votedOctober 4, 20160
Hello lady.
I'm going to tell you the way i learn how to write correctly, though i know i'm still committing some mistakes, i've read a lot of books that were in english, all the movies, all the series, even subtitles all of it in english, that is the way i learned how to write correctly though i stilled visited google dictionary at that time.
0 votedOctober 4, 20160Hola!
Yo en lo personal si creo en el destino pero tambien creo que uno puede manejarlo durante el "viaje", a que me refiero con esto? bueno es algo simple realmente, imaginate un arbol enorme y verde y frondoso como tu quieras imaginatelo, ahora te digo ese arbol que te imaginaste es tu vida, ese arbol representa tu pasado, presente y futuro, como asi? te preguntaras y yo te respondo las raices de este, es el tiempo que tardas en nacer, cuando naces tu ya has brotado buscando la luz para crecer más, todo el tronco grueso va a representar toda tu formación desde chiquito hasta el momento en el que comienzas a tomar tus propias decisiones te preguntaras por que es tronco recto y grueso con una que otro desvio minimo? bueno yo te digo que es por que tus papas te quisieron desde el momento en que naciste y ellos nunca van a buscar el mal para ti, por eso lograste llegar a ser una buena persona, llegamos a la ultima parte del arbol que son todas las ramas, estas representan todas las decisiones que tomaste y no tomaste y sus consecuencias, sin embargo ese arbol esta sembrado ya grande y solamente te acoplan a el, por asi decirte todas las decisiones, errores, victorias, sus caminos ya estan trazados, ahora bien tu diras entonces donde queda el libre albeldrio? yo te respondo el libre albeldrio sirve por asi decirlo para que tu tengas el impetu de escoger uno de todos los caminos que se te pondran enfrente, aunque ya esten hecho predeterminadamente... no se si mi ejemplo te sirvio de algo pero bueno espero que te haya ayudado :D
0 votedOctober 4, 20160- Creo que seria mostrarles y hacer que experimenten las buenas partes de la vida, hacer que se diviertan, ir preguntandoles cual es su meta, en general seria encaminarlos en un camino en el cual ellos puedan ver realmente que la vida no solo es sufrimiento como ellos dirian sino que tambien existen momentos felices, como cuando uno comparte con su familia, novia, etc. Bueno eso he tratado yo con una compañera que tuve en los ultimos 2 a 3 años, ella solia ver el vaso medio vacio en lugar de verlo medio lleno, trate de llevarla a varios lugares y hacer que disfrutará tambien la hice enfrentar las situaciones que tenia en su vida, trate de aconsejarla lo mejor posible y pues ya llevo como 6 meses de no verla y por su facebook se mira como que le va bien y se mira mas alegre.0 votedOctober 4, 20160
