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Movie Review —Forrest Gump
Although we have so many advantages in our life, why we still cannot do anything as successfully as Gump. I think these three people who were just like three important elements in his life led him to achieve his objects. Gump's mother tried her best to afford him to go to the public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful parts in the movie, in order to let her son accept education like normal students rather than lose on his childhood. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love is for her children. Jenny, who was Forrest's beloved woman through his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: Run, Forrest, run! Run, Forrest, run! From then on, he got used to insist on running no matter what he did and where he was. He kept on running in every football games and became a football star. He kept on running in the wars and became a hero. He kept on running when he began to engage in business and became a billionaire and everyone's idol in America. It is just a simple thing for most people to run but hard to persist to do it sincerely and devoutly toward the goal. Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp and asked Gump to join with him after the war. Gump promised him to do it. Unfortunately Bubba died in the war and left Gump alone to fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise no matter how difficult it was and what challenges did he met in business. I think these three person are just one of the important parts in Gump's life. But, all in all, the most important factor is Forrest Gump's spirit of fearlessness, kindness, faithfulness which are also invaluable gifts that the movie want to bring to us.
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Could you help me to correct the following paragraph? Thank you!
Movie Review —Forrest GumpAlthough we have so many advantages in our life, why we still cannot do anything as successfully as Gump. I think these three people who were just like three important elements in his life led him to achieve his objects. Gump's mother tried her best to afford him to go to the public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful parts in the movie, in order to let her son accept education like normal students rather than lose on his childhood. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love is for her children. Jenny, who was Forrest's beloved woman through his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: Run, Forrest, run! Run, Forrest, run! From then on, he got used to insist on running no matter what he did and where he was. He kept on running in every football games and became a football star. He kept on running in the wars and became a hero. He kept on running when he began to engage in business and became a billionaire and everyone's idol in America. It is just a simple thing for most people to run but hard to persist to do it sincerely and devoutly toward the goal. Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp and asked Gump to join with him after the war. Gump promised him to do it. Unfortunately Bubba died in the war and left Gump alone to fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise no matter how difficult it was and what challenges did he met in business. I think these three person are just one of the important parts in Gump's life. But, all in all, the most important factor is Forrest Gump's spirit of fearlessness, kindness, faithfulness which are also invaluable gifts that the movie want to bring to us.
Hello, i leave my correction here... unfortunately i had to change the way you said some things, because it was hard to understand the meaning at the beginning so i took the liberty to correct all the paragraph in a better way, the things you have to improve are connection words, how to use the past, present, and future, i may have some mistakes but i think is fine the way i put it so check the paragraph out and ask me if you have any question.
Even though we have so many advantages on our lifes, we still can not do things as successfully as Forest Gump did. I believe there were 3 people that were important elements in Forest Gump's life, those 3 people guide him to the achievement of his objectives. Gump's mother tried her best so he can afford him to go to the public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful part in the movie, in order to let her son receive education like normal students rather than lose on his childhood. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love can be. Jenny who was Gump's beloved woman through his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: "Run, Forrest, run!, Run, Forrest, run!. From that point on his life he got used to insist on running no matter what he did or where he was. He kept on running be it in football game, war or a business. As simple it may seem "to run" for most of the people is hard to persist to do it sincerely and devoutly. Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp and asked Gump to join him after war. Gump promised him he will do it. Unfortunately Bubba died during the war and left him alone so he can fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise, it didn't matter if it was difficult or there were any challenges in the business. I believe those 3 were one important part of Forrest's life. In spite of all difficulties of Forrest Gump's life the things that were the most important part of him were his spirit of fearlessness, kindness, faithfulness which are also invaluable gifts that the movie wanted to bring to us.
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Bubba, who was Gump's best friend in the war, eagerly looked forward to do a business of shrimp starting a shrimp business and asked Gump to join with him after the war. Gump promised him to that he would do it. Unfortunately, Bubba died in the war and left Gump alone to fulfill the dream they once had. Gump didn't break his promise no matter how difficult it was and or what challenges did he met in business. I think these three person are just one of the important parts in Gump's life. But, all in all, the most important factor is Forrest Gump's spirit of fearlessness, kindness, and faithfulness which are was also an invaluable gifts that the movie wanted to bring to us.
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Could you help me to correct the following paragraph? Thank you!
Movie Review —Forrest GumpAlthough we have so many advantages in our lives, why we still cannot can't we do anything as successfully as Gump? I think these there were three people who were just like three important elements in his life and who led him to achieve his objectives. Gump's mother tried her best to afford him to go to the sending him to public school, which is the most touching and sorrowful parts in the movie, in order to let her son accept get an education like normal students rather than lose out on his childhood. This was the most touching part of the movie. I think she not only gave birth to Gump and taught him to be confident and optimistic in life, but also let us know how great a mother's love is for her children. Jenny, who was Forrest's beloved woman throughout his lifetime, taught him a significant lesson, which was a great turning point in his life. Jenny said: Run, Forrest, run! Run, Forrest, run! From then on, he got used to insisting on running no matter what he did and was doing or where he was. He kept on running in every football games and became a football star. He kept on running in the wars and became a hero. He kept on running when he began to engage in business and became a billionaire and everyone's idol in America an idol for everyone in America. It is just a simple thing for most people to run but it is hard to persist to do in doing it sincerely and devoutly toward the goal.
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