Choosing to study at colleges and university in foreign countries

Studying abroad is a great chance for everybody. It not only brings enjoyable, but also challenges to themselves. From my viewpoint, choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries will give us more benefits than drawbacks.
You will be hardly to adopt with a new environment. You must build a dependent life without your parents, friends, and familiar things. Not every student can be concentrate on studying when they leaves abroad. Feeling loneliness and homesickness is very awful. You make a decision yourself in difficult situations or face up with strange people in a new country. Whether can we be brave enough to get over everything or not? Difficulty in communicating with people is second drawbacks. In during time studying abroad, communication is one of major tools for student access culture, friend, teacher . If you do not have enough knowledge about language, sometimes you will be able to understand which lectures speak. It leads to  depression, boring when not controlling lesson.
On other hand, the opportunity is bigger aspect than disadvantages. The firstly strength is developing independent lifestyle. When a student is educated in their hometown, they will not be chance to understand how to live independently. Therefore, they have depended on their parents who have responsibility to take care of them and they felt that this is very normal. Studying a university in foreign countries will help you more mature, own your lives. Moreover, approaching with the higher education standard and the advanced equipment environment is better a job. When you are going to come back hometown, company and concern are willing to get you into vital position and to fit your quality. And, it is your basic platform to enter the life, you will be more confident about yourself. Last but not least, making friend with lots of people those who come from different countries. We will learn new and unique things from them, such asculture, language, lifestyles. I believe that it is very great in strange environment. They are person people who we can share sadness, happiness when living far from hometown and understand your emotion without relatives, friends, parents. And sometimes, they also contribute and give us some interesting ideas.
In conclusion, studying in a foreign university will receive more useful things than drawbacks. Therefore, it is a good orientation for life which helps you escaping out of poverty in future.

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The role of Education in society

If there is a vital thing in the modern lives( why you write"lives" in this case?), I will confirm that it is education. From my viewpoint, pedagogical( it is a adj!!!) is great platform which leads to success. There are lots of its advantages which we can not find.
On the other hand, education must prepare the student for future occupational positions ( this sentece is not clear about meaning). This is an big opportunity to look for jobs. You will fell more confident when bring a CV with good knowledge, high quality, great behavior( after when is a clause, your clause don't have Subject). Therefore, the employer will be pleased with everything which you bring. Thanks to studying, you can apply useful understanding of school to my field. Step by step, the experiences in employment is very exciting. It is not only make you more mature, but also to be ready to enter your life.
Futhermore, schools are the settings in which students develop a variety of interpersonal skills, needed (???)   or entering into friendship, participating in community affaires, and relating to others in workplace. As for me, I am the semester second student(??)  of a pedagogical university. So ( dont write "so" in writing), I realized that individual skills of a teacher such as: presentation, writing board, applying technology in lesson plan are very essential and necessary. This is a foundation to bring knowledge for your student. Besides, they can take part in society, volunteer activities and share hard situation. It is a chance which help you active, creative and master yourself.
Last but not least, education is also positive experiences( sai Ngữ pháp)  for students themselves and communities as well. By studying in the school, students would have more friends, since( sao lại dùng since ở đây?) many schools such as: universities are accepting students from various local areas and some even from overseas. Therefore, students would have the chance in expanding their networks and learning new languages and cultures as well.
To sum up, we do not deny the important importance of education in our lives. It has a part in building many talented people, active and dynamic for society that helping our country more and more developing.

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