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One of the most tense movies I have ever seen.
Today I watched a movie called ''The Walk''. This movie is about a man who crossed <strike>the</strike> [on a] wire between [the] World Trade Center [towers] in America. I [had] wanted to watch this movie at [the] theater. But I couldn't<strike>. So</strike> [, so]I had to wait for the DVD of the movie to come out. Actually this movie was amazing. I was sweaty on my hands while watching the guy walking on the wire[this sentence is not wrong, but it is grammatically awkward - you can say, for example: "My hands were sweaty while I was watching this guy walk on the wire"]. Even now, every time I remember the scene I sweat.
Note: the sentence "I had wanted to watch this movie" is past participle. This means that in the past you wanted to watch. If you use the simple past tense, "I wanted to watch this movie" it sounds as if 'yesterday' or 'this morning', you wanted to watch the movie. I think you meant to use the past participle here...?
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September 2, 2016
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What is the best way to learn English
My goal is to be a translator to Japanese from English. I'm learning English at university, but my skill is not so good.
Now, I'm in summer vacation, so I want to try some methods.
First, I started memorizing a lot of vocabularies which I thought difficult. I have used a text which I had used when I was a high school student.
Next, I made a habit to watch many online newspapers like The New York Times and The Japan News which written in English.
What is the best way to learn English?

What is the best way to learn English?
My goal is to become a translator from English to Japanese. I study English at the University, but my skill level is not so good. At this time, I am in summer vacation, so I wanted to try new approaches...
 First, I started memorizing a lot of new words, which I thought was a difficult process; then, I used a textbook, which I used when I was a high school student; next, I made a habit of reading online newspapers, like the New York Times, and the Japan News, which are written in English.
 [Mizuki san, it seems like your thought is not finished here..? You made a list of things you tried, but you have to say whether they worked or not, so that the point of your message is complete] 
What is the best way to learn English?

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August 31, 2016
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Toru san, Amazing! Thank you for sharing! Your writing is good and easy to understand. Following are some suggested grammatical edits... 
 There are 20 world <s>heritages</s> [heritage sites] approved by UNESCO in Japan. You may <s>name</s> [think of] Kyoto and Mt Fuji as the most famous ones, and believe that all of them are outside of Tokyo. As a matter of fact, <s>it's</s>[that is] not true. 
The Ogasawara Islands <s>where is</s> [located] 1,000 km from [the] Tokyo Metropolitan [area] <s>isalso a</s> [are also] part of Tokyo and registered in the list [of] the World Heritage five years ago. They are rural and isolated islands, and <s>there is no flight</s> [there are no flights there] from any city <s>of</s> [in] Japan. <s>You</s> [Although, you] have to spend 11 hours on a ferry to reach <s>there. It is still Tokyo!!</s> [the Islands, they are still Tokyo territory!] 
But<s>thanks to the</s> [Thanks to their starting a new sentence or paragraph with a conjunction like ‘But’ sounds informal but grammatically acceptable] isolation, the <s>island has</s> [islands have] <s>raised</s> [developed] many endemic [species of] animals and plants for a long time. Some scientists say that <s>it</s> [this] is a good <s>sample</s> [example] of evolution like the Galapagos Islands. The Ogasawara Islands are located at the intersection of Southeast and Northeast Asia, and on a line of <s>volcanos under the sea</s> [underwater or under the sea volcanoes –in this sentence, “underwater” qualifies volcanoes, so it goes first]. 
According to <s>the</s> [article is used for specific or definite nouns only] scientists, this <s>position</s> [particular location] has created [produced] some unique species there. 
 Unfortunately, I have not been there yet, but I would like to visit there with my wife after I retire. We will [would] spend at least one week <s>to explore</s> [exploring] the islands <s>to watch</s> [watching or observing] <s>some</s> endemic plants and <s>enjoy a</s> [enjoying the] beautiful sea and rainforests there. 
Here is aphoto <s>on</s> [from] the website of the Ogasawara <s>Island</s> [Islands’] Tourism Board. If you are interested in the Ogasawara [Islands], please visit the following site



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August 30, 2016
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Japanese trains
 
Chizuko san,
 Nice post! I would like to share some edits [ … ]:
 It is said that <s>the</s> [article ‘the’ is used only for specific items, like “the Tokyo trains are clean”] trains arrive [or “are always”] on time in Japan. It's true. I heard it's rare in the world [better: “I heard that it is rare around the world for trains to be always on time”]. So, arriving on time seems to be very surprising and sometimes strange to <s>the</s> international people [better: “foreigners” or “foreign visitors”]. I've never thought of that, I mean, <s>the</s> trains' arriving on time is natural and usual to me. I asked myself why the Japanese trains are organized well [better: “I asked myself why Japanese trains are so well organized”]. To make the passengers happy? To make it efficient and [“and to”-- you are listing reasons starting with “to”] make more money? <s>or</s> [“Or”] <s>just love doing tidly?</s> [better: Or is it simply because Japanese people like to be very organized?”] I'm not sure[comma “,”-use before ‘but’ at the beginning of an independent clause] but probably they love to make everything <s>organized well</s> [“well organized”- ‘well’ is used to qualify ‘organized’, so use adjective before noun]. <s>They </s>[better: “Japanese people” –make sure your readers know who ‘They’ are] love to make a line, stand in line very patiently even if it's [“an”] emergency [“,”] like [“during an”] <s>the</s> earthquake.
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August 20, 2016
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August 20, 2016
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Shizue san, Konnichiwa!

Thank you for sharing this experience with others! I would like to suggest a few edits to your post [ … ]:

<s>This ‘Obon’</s>[You would start this sentence with “Obon”, or rather, “The festival of Obon”], as well as being a religious event to commemorate the souls of ancestors, has the air of a national holiday, with many people traveling around the country<s> and, for</s> [you can use a period here: “. For”] those not aware of Buddhist practices, [<s>the]</s> Obon [is celebrated] around August 15[period “. It ”] is just a summer vacation, though most people throughout the country maintain the tradition of <s>visting</s> [visiting] family graves. <s>this is web site</s>. [“This is the web site” --did you mean to provide a hyper link?] 

I [<s>was</s>] grew up <s>at</s> [by] the seaside. The tray [? “tray” is a big dish used to carry glasses at the restaurant] was told that a dead person returned from the waterside. "Okuribi" is one of the events observed in Bon festivals to usher out from this mortal world to the other world those spirits of the dead that had once returned to their old homes during the Bon period. [well done!] <s>I heard my parens</s> [“When I was a child, I heard my parents say”] that you must not swim in the sea <s>in</s> [during] the Bon Festival. My mom [formal expression is better here ‘mother’] passed away 10 years ago. <s>I dreamt of about my mother Bon Festival</s>. [‘I dreamt of my mother during Bon festival”]. 


Probably [here a comma is needed “,”] I think that she came to meet me [this sentence is correct, but it would sound more natural if you say “I think that she probably came to meet me”








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August 18, 2016
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Coffee
For the first time in several months since I took a cup of coffee.
Before I used to drink decaffeinated teas for good sleep.
Since I needed to learn tastes of coffee for my works,I started to take it again.
It helps me to wake me up in the morning.So from today I can take it only in the morning.

 
Kanako san, your sentences are well written and perfectly understandable. I would like suggest a few grammatical edits [ ... ]:
 
For the first time in several months since I took a cup of coffee. [Kanako san, the order can be improved. “I had a cup of coffee for the first time in several months”. I also struggle with the Japanese use of ‘goro’ or ‘kara’ :). In English, it is more common to say “it has been”. Otherwise, in this sentence, you could also say: “it had been several months since I had a cup of coffee until today”]
 
Before I used to drink decaffeinated teas for good sleep. [This sentence is correct grammatically –it neds a comma “,” after before. You could also say “In the past, I used to drink decaffeinated teas for a good sleep”
 
Since I needed to learn tastes of coffee for my works,I started to take it again [“Since I needed to learn about various tastes of coffee for my work, I started to drink coffee again” –Note that “take” a drink is not an English expression, you “have” a drink or simply “drink” something. Your sentence is correct, but I wonder if you mean for this sentence to be in the past tense? ‘Did you need to learn’ or do you need to learn now in the present?]
 
It helps me to wake me up in the morning. [Coffee helps me to wake up in the morning]. So from today I can take it only in the morning. [“So starting today, I can only drink it in the morning”
 
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August 18, 2016
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