person 2

My close friend Jonathan is 28 years old, he lives in Rancagua and he's a Music DJ.
He's medium height and quite overweight. He has black short hair and brown eyes and he has a big nose and a mouth too.
He's really funny, extrovert, friendly, generous and kind.
Sometimes, he works for himself, repairing bicycles and cars. In the past, he was in the communist party for a long time, but he left because he saw a lot of corruption. He isn't participating in any politics party.

Person 2 you have good english but i would read more english books to see how natives write naturally. Also simplify your sentences more

keep up the good work