Today is was a terrible day . I lost my scholarship because of a subject. I lost my student card and is it stopped testing for that subject. I really feel even worse because if I can't change the result of it , i will have to change to register my major. I can't talk with to my dad about it, because he will be worry. I must keep calm now, I don't think I can travel this summer I can't travel because i will have to find a part-time job to make money for to take the test again. I really regret about my wander what has happened. During the last 5 months, I have really try tried to learn it but now I have lost the opportunity. In If I can't change things this summer, if I can't change, then everything will become terrible. My friend helped me all this afternoon to try to contact with the teacher, but he can't do that anything. Afterwards she took me to eat spicy Korean noodles. I was crying when I was eating but it's really I felt better . Now, I feel sad but i'm ok . I'll try my best in the next subjects and find other opportunities for myself . I 'm optimistic but I think I should will be sad for a few days.

[Hi Quyen. Your writing is very good! I'm sorry you've had this experience. I hope everything works out for you. You have a high proficiency level of English. Keep up the good work!]

Practicing!

I'm hoping he'll be at the party tonight.

2) Their district is far from mine but I will reach it. [Good.]

3) The shape of this football ball is irregular, problably probably because we had have used it so much.

4) When the singer comes came out, the crowd was so excited. [both verbs are past tense]

5) I'm only willing to do that only if you will give me a reward. [small adjustment to sound more natural, but main idea was still clear]

6) I've done made a lot of attempts but it the result is always the same, this car isn't drivable for me.

7) I've tried to pass trough through that there but it's so difficult. 

8) She is fast but her opponent is faster. [Good.]

9) Our work is was destroyed but we can do it another again. [verb should be past tense]

10) I have delete deleted all the files, so now we have to restart the program. 

[Good job Teo! Keep up the good work!]

Introduction

VOLUNTEER WORK:

Volunteer in Street Children Protection Centre "Casal dels Infants del Raval" (Barcelona).

Volunteer in Conservation and protection program for of sea turtles in Tortuguero (Costa Rica). 

Skills HIGHLIGHTS [maybe try putting this section under INTRODUCTION] 

Patient and self-control self-motivated
Conscientiousness, in particularly to take your commitments when applying construction criticism 
Honest Trustworthy and discreet with, privacy elements confidential or sensitive information
Sense of hearing Attentive listener
Friendly instructions Take direction well
Fluency Effective communicator when dealing with children
Real resilience and tolerance determination
Good Adept at stress management and conflict resolution

[Good work! Here are some adjustments, using phrases more commonly used in CVs in the US. Best wishes!] 

Many people think that Brazil is a HOT country and sometimes it's it really is. so But there's winter here too and the winter is really cold!! While As I am writing this it's 11°Celsius (50° Fahrenheit) here and my fingers is are frozen... I don't know what more I can write here...

3 BEDROOM APARTMENT IN PISA

(For infos more information about on the location, please see "other info" below)

Available from starting SEPTEMBER. Stipulation from NOW.
Well-FURNISHED.
CONDOMINIAL CONDOMINIUM CHARGES FOR UTILITIES: (includes: water, heating, hot water when heating on INCLUDED): 143 € with balance at the end of each year.

INCLUDED AMENITIES: elevator, reserved parking (underground garage), private cellar, utility room, dishwasher, washing machine, oven, microwave oven, insect screens for windows and doors, possibility of transer of registration for internet transfer of registered internet service possible (wi-fi and cable).

DESCRIPTION:
The apartment is at the second floor apartment (with elevator). Wide living room with balcony, utility room, separeted separate kitchenette, bathroom with shower, window and little balcony, single (or 120 cm bed) bedroom / study, double bedroom with seven door closet.  1st bedroom/study has single bed (120 cm), 2nd bedroom has double bed with 7 door wardrobe. 

Replacement in 4+4 CONTRACT for a year or new contract.

OTHER INFOS
- We're three students and we're Current residents are students, all leaving the apartment in September.

- We spend around Current approx monthly expense is 320 € a month all included (includes: rent, condo charges, gas, light, trash, internet). 

- Right in front of the building there's the bus stop "Pungilupo 2" (bus 13) is directly in front of the building. In 5 minutes by feet you arrive at the bus stop "Padule 2" (bus 14) is within walking distance (5 minutes).
- The area is quite and nice, Quiet and friendly neighborhood. Beautiful scenery and more fresh air in summer than any other place in Pisa areas.

- Nearby Shops within walking distance: Coop Cisanello (supermarket, 15 minutes by feet ), PAM (supermarket, 10 minutes by feet), Isola Verde movie theatre (a few minutes by feet), hospital, banks, postal office, pharmacy, family doctors, hairdressers, tobacco shop and many others...

lagacy

Legacy - literally means money or property a person leaves others after they die. It is also used to indicate the effect something has had on the world after it is gone.

the most worthy lagacy from our ancient is not the old marterials but the country the thinking [Good.]

The greatest legacy ancient civilizations have left, is not their buildings, but their knowledge.

skectch

Sketch - this can mean a drawing without many details or a short skit or play, usually a comedy

can u give me a skectch about your parttime job. about your workmate [Good.]

Can you write up a funny sketch about your workmate at your job?

curriculum - this refers to all the matters that will be discussed in a course. Often times, a teacher will give the students a copy of their curriculum or syllabus at the beginning of the course, showing what they will study for the next few months. 

The professor handed out a copy of the course curriculum.

patrick has finished all his curriculum [Here you could use the word "homework" or "schoolwork".]

Patrick has finished all of his homework.

[or if you mean Patrick will graduate soon, you could say "Patrick has finished all of his coursework he needs to graduate."]

devoted
his a mat guy devoted in his research [Good. Just remember that if we are mentioning what a person is devoted to, we follow the verb with the preposition "to"]

He is a math professor devoted to his research. 

He is a man devoted to his family.

He is a devoted man. [meaning he is devoted to many things, but we are not mentioning to what, so we don't use "to"]

[Great job! Keep up the good work! Smart idea to write up practice sentences!]

Today I watched a French movie named called "Samba".

[If we are talking about a film or book, we more often use to verb "to call".]

I haven't been interesting interested in watching French movies before, but this one has changed my mind.

[The word "interesting" describes on an object or person that people are responding to. Ex. "This book is interesting." or "She always has something interesting to say." or "She's an interesting person." 

The word "interested" describes a person who likes or doesn't like something. Ex. "I'm interested in art." or "No, thank you. I'm not interested."]

It's about an African immigrant called [or "named" (used more commonly)] Samba who'd been in France for almost 10 years with no papers nor an opportunity for a better job. All he had was his uncle, who worked in a restaurant and helped him from time to time. Samba fell in love with a beautiful woman, who worked as an immigration officer, and she was the responsible for his case. The police caught Samba and put him in a temporary prison so as to wait for his trial which would decide whether would he stay in France or be deported back to his country...

[Good job Moorad! Your summary of the film is very clear and easy to read. Keep up the good work!]

Activity Activites in Central park

[The verb "are" and the adjective "many" can be used with the noun "activities" because it is plural.]

You can go to the museum, go to the zoo, enjoy a boat ride, or ridding ride a horse. Whatever you'd like!

[When listing actions, make sure all of the verbs share the same tense (in this case, the simple present).]

In summer, we enjoy the festival in the park.

For example, It features a classical music concert , a film festival, and Shakespeare in the park.

Shakespeare in the park is the stage theatre. Amateur actors performs the story plays written by Shakespeare.

Of course, we can get enjoy these activities on for free.

Central park is the best place we playing outside on free for free entertainment.

In the past, people who lived in NYC they had a good time with nature [or, "enjoyed the nature of Central Park".].

Now, we have not only nature, but also many activities, as well as art or and entertainment to enjoy in Central park.

[Great job! Keep up the good work!]