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J'habite à Brooklyn depuis quatre ans et j'ai habité auparavant à Chicago. J'adore voyager à l'étranger et découvrir les traditions d'autres cultures, c'est pourquoi j'apprends le français. (J'aime bien aussi le procès d'apprendre une nouvelle langue.) Je serais ravi de faire un échange de conversation avec vous. Une petite liste de mes loisirs: je joue de plusieurs instruments, j'aime bien faire de l'escalade, et récemment je m'intéresse aux échecs.

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"No future for public transport". There are problems in this <strike>easy</strike> essay please correct it.
I live in a third world country. Because of that we need a good public transportation system, but unfortunately we don't have <strike>good public transportation system</strike> one (no need to repeat this phrase) due to a lack of government <strike>intention</strike> intervention (other words are possible). Due to this we have no future for our public transport.

In our country we have public and <strike>privet</strike> private bus services but <strike>both of are not provided better service for people</strike> neither provides good service. Government bus services <strike>are</strike> have not improved since 1970, <strike>still</strike> they are still maintaining the same old buses, and because of this they have a very limited number of buses. This is the best example of <strike>our</strike> the future of <strike>the</strike> our government transport system.

Instead of further development of that bus service they have allowed the private sector to run buses. The government had not been <strike>provided</strike> providing tax benefits for bus owners. Bus owners have no permission to increase bus fares. Due to this the bus owners have faced lots of difficulties to maintain their buses. The government is not allowed to change the bus fare according to fuel price changes. Because of this some owners are not operating; on the other hand, they have to find a solution to maintain the service (this sentence was a little awkward but it's OK.). <strike>Therefore they have chosen a solution, it is</strike> The solution they have found is to stop the bus at every bus stand for <strike>about</strike> 15 to 20 minutes to get the maximum number of people from every bus stand. <strike>Duse</strike> Due to this the bus traveling time from one destination to another <strike>is</strike> increases. Due to this (try not to repeat "Due to this". You could just say "So" instead) bus service standards have fallen <strike>down</strike> and people are <strike>also</strike> suffering every day.
Therefore, our bus service has no future. It is just operating for daily needs without improvement.

In American English I would say "public transportation", not "public transport". But I think this is OK in other English dialects.
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April 22, 2016
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There is no specific <strike>time</strike> length for the engagement period but it usually lasts one year. After the engagement party the process of dating and getting to know each other begins. There are two official feasts <strike>(invite people to eat)</strike> held, and people are invited to eat. First the groom's to be family invites the bride's to be family over for <strike>lanch</strike> lunch or dinner. Then the opposite happens; the bride's to be family <strike>invits</strike> invites the groom's to be family. During this period the groom-to-be starts the house processing, usually accompanied by the bride-to-be. They also buy (alshabka); it's part of the <strike>dawry</strike> dowry and <strike>it's</strike> is basically a set of gold or more (or more than one set of gold). The bride accompanied by her mother and sisters starts shopping for the trousseau. When the <strike>betrotheds</strike> <strike>are</strike> couple is ready and all the <strike>prepararions</strike> preparations are done, they <strike>schedual</strike> schedule the wedding date.

#I feel like my English is poor and weak. Please help me to sound more like a native speaker. Thanks a lot.#

-Because you are not talking about an exact moment, "duration" or "length" is better than "time" in the first sentence.
-A few spelling mistakes here and there but nothing terrible.
-Bride-to-be and groom-to-be are fine (you should include the hyphens) but it's a little awkward when writing possessives. Writing "the groom-to-be's family" is perhaps a little informal. It's better to avoid it completely by rearranging your sentence. You could write "the family of the groom-to-be" instead.
-What do you mean by "house processing"? Do you mean that they start searching for a house to buy?
-To me, "a set of gold or more" means "a set of gold, and some other things." But "more than one set of gold" means "two or more sets of gold". It depends on what you mean. You could also say "at least one set of gold".
-Because "alshabka" is a non-English word, I would put it in italics or quotes. For example: "They also buy alshabka, which is part of the dowry and is basically a set of gold, or more."
-"betrotheds" is very formal and antiquated. When it's used, it sometimes sounds like a joke to me.
-I did not know the word "trousseau" but it looks like you used it right! I would consider it a very uncommon word, but it seems appropriate here.
-There is a very funny comic by The Oatmeal about "alot" vs. "a lot" if you search on Google. :)

This was very interesting to read! Thank you for sharing! I think your English is very good. Most of the things I corrected are very small errors.
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April 19, 2016
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Mon premier tournoi d’échecs Récemment je m’intéresse beaucoup aux échecs et j’ai décidé de participer à un tournoi pour amateurs. Le tournoi a eu lieu au Marshall Chess Club à Manhattan, dans le quartier Greenwich Village. Ce club est une véritable institution, avec une grande histoire. Plusieurs des meilleurs joueurs du siècle passé et des personnes célèbres ont été membres du club. C’est où Bobby Fischer et Donald Byrne ont joué le « Jeu du Siècle » en 1956. Et Marcel Duchamp s’y est inscrit après avoir quitté sa profession comme artiste. J’ai parcouru quelques livres pendant les trois semaines avant le tournoi, mais je n’avais joué qu’en ligne sur mon ordinateur. Jouer sur un échiquier physique, avec des pièces en trois dimensions, devant une personne vivant – c’est complètement différent. Il y avait nombreux joueurs adultes, mais la moitié étaient des enfants d’une certaine école privée. Dans mon premier jeu, j’ai fait une grave erreur et un garçon qui n’avait que dix ans m’a battu plutôt facilement. J’étais un peu gêné et j’avais peur que le reste du tournoi serait une catastrophe. Mais heureusement j’ai gagné le deuxième jeu et le quatrième. Mon adversaire pour le troisième jeu était un joueur fort, et bien que nous étions à égalité pendant les 15 ou 20 premiers coups, finalement j’ai fait une gaffe et il a gagné. Malgré les défaites, c’était une bonne expérience, j’ai appris beaucoup, et je voudrais participer encore bientôt.
April 12, 2016
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March 25, 2016
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Mes pensées sur Le Petit Prince Je viens de lire Le Petit Prince, un livre français très connu et aimé par tous. C’est le premier vrai livre en français que j’ai lu. Quelle mignonne d’histoire ! J’ai trouvé la personnalité du petit prince et les dessins de l’auteur tellement drôles, mais j’avoue que les questions constantes du petit prince m’ont énervé parfois. Ce que me gêne, c’est qu’avant de finir le livre, j’ai lu un article qui discute le symbolisme et le message caché dans l’histoire. Cet article insiste que c’est une allégorie pour la guerre, que les pertes et la tristesse du petit prince sont semblable à celles du monde durant la deuxième guerre mondiale (ou quelque chose comme ça…je ne me souviens pas). Cette idée m’a rendu plutôt triste et je ne pouvais plus lire sans penser à ce symbolisme. J’avais un sens d’appréhension, une certaine crainte en lisant le reste du livre. (Moi, je pense trop, peut-être.) Malgré cette peine, je recommanderais ce gentil livre à tout le monde. Mais je conseillerais peut-être de ne pas chercher autres significations dans le texte. C’est une sympa histoire, pleine des illustrations drôles, et même des philosophies profondes.
March 25, 2016
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I agree with you that it should be "smistamento", referring to the place where wounded soldiers are sorted and sent to different hospitals. A native English speaker would definitely not know this word (unless they also spoke Italian), and would understand it from the context, as you did. I hope you're enjoying the book -- it's a wonderful story! Hemingway is one of my favorite authors.
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March 25, 2016
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