Red is what I removed. Blue in brackets after a red phrase is what to replace the red phrase with.

Red with no blue means to just remove it.

At the bottom I will have the paragraph with all of my suggested changes in it.

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English TV show

In order to improve my English skills I’m looking forward (for) TV shows. A friend advised me to watch Parenthood. It is a very good TV show, it is about everyday life, so it is useful.
I have finished the entire show, so I am currently looking for a new one. Maybe I will watch Gilmore Girls or Wilfred which is another type of TV show who (that) seems funny. Do you have any suggestion ?

As for Suggestions, I don't really know what kind of shows you like but these are some of my favourites:

- Psych - Is now cancelled. It was a comedy series about a guy who is very observant and notices small details. He calls in a tip for the police which leads to the arrest of a murderer. The police think that he was in on it and that is how he got his information. So to avoid being sent to jail he claims that he is Psychic. He then works for the police as a Psychic Detective for the remainder of the series. This show is also filmed mostly in the Vancouver area of British Columbia Canada. Since I am from Vancouver, that is also something I liked about it.

- White Collar : also cancelled. Is about an art thief who escapes from prison. After he is caught, he cuts a deal with the FBI that make him a CI (Confidential Informant). So now he works for the FBI to take down criminals, while still doing some illegal business on the side without the FBI's knowledge.

Burn Notice : also cancelled (wow I like a lot of cancelled shows). This one is about an American spy. He is in the middle of one of his missions when he gets a burn notice (In the show we find out that a burn notice is a fancy way of saying that he has been fired). The show is basically him trying to find out why he was burned, and he also does some odd jobs around Miami.

Not Going Out : also cancelled (I am starting to see a trend here). This is a British comedy starring British comedian Lee Mack. If you are new to English, this may not be the best show since a lot of jokes are puns or sarcastic, and Lee Mack's accent could be hard for people to understand who are new to English. Nevertheless, it is one of my favourite shows and is really funny.

I will add one more (I could keep going but I think there is enough here)

- Suits : Finally, a series that has not been cancelled. A show about a guy who is a drug dealer. He is caught running from the cops and runs into an interview for a Lawyer position while running away. He ends up getting in for an interview anyways because one of the guys did not show up. It turns out that he has perfect recall and can repeat anything he reads word for word at will. He gets hired as an associate, but he is working illegally because he has not attended a law school or taken the exam under his name.

English TV show

In order to improve my English skills I’m looking for TV shows. A friend advised me to watch Parenthood. It is a very good TV show, it is about everyday life, so it is useful.
I have finished the entire show, so I am currently looking for a new one. Maybe I will watch Gilmore Girls or Wilfred which is another of TV show that seems funny. Do you have any suggestion ?

red is what I removed, everything in side the blue brackets is what I replaced it with.

If there is only red with no blue following it, it means that you can just remove it.

If there is just blue text, that means just add that in without removing anything

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Today i (I)...

Today i (I) went to the downtown, to study and meet some friends, (and) then i (I) went home.
Clementina, my dog, was waiting for me, she (. She) was very playful, so i take (I got) some toys and play with she, i (played with her. I) gave she (her) a bath, and food. Now i'm (I'm) writing about it with my amateur english

Someone can help me ?
My writing is very bad?

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Notes:

1) i : Not sure if you know, or if you just did not want to capitalize the I's (we all do it), but in English the word "I" is capitalized, even if it is like this: "I'm"

2) to the : "to the" in the first sentence (highlighted red) is not necessary. Being a native English speaker, I cannot actually think of why, but that is the way it is. (Maybe someone can help answer the exact reason?)

3) , : The 2 red commas are unnecessary, but the second comma should be replaced with an "and"

4) i take : I changed to "I got". Could also be "I picked up". This is a past event, so the verbs should be in a past form

5) play with she : it is passed tense still, so it is "played". It is "her" instead of "she" because "she" is a subject pronoun. This means that "she" can only be used as the subject of the sentence. "Her" is an object pronoun which means that "her" is the thing that you are playing with.

6) she : Same as the previous. "I gave her a bath". "I" is the subject pronoun, and "her" is the object pronoun.

I hope this helps. If you have any questions don't hesitate to ask, and keep on learning :)

Below is the paragraph with my changes incorporated:

Today I...

Today I went downtown to study and meet some friends and then I went home.
Clementina, my dog, was waiting for me. She was very playful, so I got some toys and played with her. I gave her a bath, and food. Now I'm writing about it with my amateur english.

Red means, remove, blue means I have changed

About me!

Hello, my name is David. I'm 14 years old boy...
Questions for me:
Where are you from?
I come from Recife, Brazil, and it is beautiful here!

How is it there?
Well, it is beautiful here. We have beaches, shopping, and other things... hahaha

*I don't write in english* :(

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Explanations:

1) "I'm 14 years old boy..." - This should be either "I'm 14 years old" as indicated below, or "I'm a 14 year old boy". They way that you have it written, "14 years old" is a description of the singular noun "boy" so "years" should also be singular - "year". If you remove "boy" it is okay because now "14 years old" is not describing a noun, and it is multiple years.

2) "I come from Brazil, in Recife" - In English we usually say "city, country", or "smallest area, bigger area, biggest area". For example, "I am from Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada". I had city, province, country. So you could change yours to "I come from Recife, Brazil". You can also say "I am from Recife, Brazil"

3) "here is beautiful" - should be changed. It is clear what you mean, but it sounds strange. It would be better as "it is beautiful here". A bit advanced now, but doing this also creates two independant clauses, which means we need a conjunction or a semi-colon. I added "and" which is a conjunction, but saying "I come from Recife, Brazil; it is beautiful here!" is also correct.

4) "How are there" - should be "how is it there", or "What is it like there"

5) "Well, here is beauty" - Should be "Well, it is beautiful here."

6) "have beach, have shopping and others" - would be a bit better if it was "We have beaches, shopping, and other things". The comman between "shopping" and "and" is optional and is called an oxford comma.

Good job, and keep learning :)

Things, that I added or changed are in Blue, things to omit are in red, green is a suggested thing to replace with what is in the brackets in green.

Some notes:

1) Your English is not awful :). In fact, it's is not even bad. There were not many things here that I could find to change or fix.

2) I changed "friends'" to "friend's" because "friends'" implies that you have more than one best friends' birthdays coming up. "Friend's" means that it is the birthday of your one best friend (If you happen to have more than one best friend with their birthday next Saturday, then of course ignore this)

3) I suggested replacing "on the following" with "next" because it is more common. People will still understand what you mean by "on the following", but I think "next" is more clear.

4) I removed the comma after "Maybe". I don't think it is necessary.

5) "I changed that's not important too much" with "That's not very important". People will still understand what you mean the way you said it, but it does not sound quite right.

6) I changed "order" to "hire". People will know what you mean with "order" but "order" is typically used with objects. Like "I ordered this sofa", but "hire" is usually used with people when you get them for a service. You could also use "call"... ie, "I decided to hire a lawyer", or "I decided to call a lawyer".

7) The last change was changing "2" to "two". Again, "2" is going to make everyone understand, but in English you are supposed to spell out small numbers.

As for your situation, I don't know about your country, but where I live prostitution is illegal, so maybe my answer is biased and will be different to others, but I would say don't do it. In addition to my personal feelings on the subject, I think it would be wise to avoid embarrassment and lowering your self-esteem. I am sure your friend would understand.

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Seeking for advice.

Hi to those reading my journal.

My best friend's birthday is coming. It's on the following (next) Saturday. I don't know what to buy him as a birthday gift. Maybe, I'll give him some money and he'll be able to buy what he really needs. Anyway, that's not very important too much.

What's important is, he's decided to hire two prostitutes and go to a sauna with them. Personally I'm not against it at all, but I'm afraid that something will go wrong. For example, it's hard for me to relax with totally new people, therefore I'm afraid that I might not be able to get aroused. Having said that, I might embarrass myself and lower my self-esteem even more.

I'm not sure what to do. If I refuse to go with him, I'll definitely disappoint him. On the other hand, If I do go there and it doesn't work out, I might end up beating myself up for making the wrong decision.

Damn it. My English is awful.